The flames

Inspired by a song.

Money and fame...
Not much of it for me but I Don't care.
The only thing that keeps my dead soul alive is the flame, stolen from the sun.
There is fire, in me.
Everything's burning,
my blood boiling cause its so beautiful.
My secret is the fire.
They locked me away from it for many long
years. Ice cold winds surround me... I light the fire,
the stolen flame.
Hell's fire burns inside again. There's a fire inside,
everything's burning.
My blood is boiling,
cause its so beautiful.
Inside there's a fire.
My secret is fire,
the flames of love.
The only thing keeping my dead soul alive,
the flames of love,
and hell. Inside there's a fire, my blood is boiling cause its so beautiful. The flames of love and rock 'n roll.
There's a fire, everything's burning.
The flames keep my dead soul alive.
My secret is fire.

Author's Note

In progress. Hope you liked it:)

Reviews

[A writer]

By the way... Which song inspired this write?

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you :)

[A writer]

You don't have to thank me. :) But if you want to... Then keep writing. :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

I'll try...but no promises.

[A writer]

Oh okay. But please try. I love your writing :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you :) that means a lot.

[A writer]

No need to thank me :) btw... I think people read enough of my trolling around for today...lol. so keep in mind that I love your work. And you don't have to thank me cuz I know you're grateful. But I'm more grateful that you shared your writes. :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Trollin? You? come on. Lol. If anyone has a problem with you liking my writes, then they should say it. But no one does...i think. Lol. Anyways, its a persons right to say what she/he thinks.

[A writer]

This is just what you need right now. Fire within. But I'm really no one to tell what you need, only you know that. I'm just a random person you met on this site... But I'm a bit different from the others...because I love your writing. :)

[E G TEN]

"my blood is boiling, cause its so beautiful" love this line so original and captivating! Thanks for sharing my friend :-P

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Heh... thanks... :)

[RiverRei]

I question your formatting decision in places but overall I love this piece. Always keep that fire lit and follow it where it takes you :) Keep writing friend!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

I will keep writing:) thanks for reviewing. Oh, and could you be a little more specific about the formating? I'm interested in how can I improve this writing. Thanks:)

[RiverRei]

Just how sometimes you have really long lines and sometimes you cut them off right before the end of a sentence. Such as this:

They locked me away from it for many long
years. Ice cold winds surround me... I light the fire,

and yet you have long sentences such as:

and hell. Inside there's a fire, my blood is boiling cause its so beautiful. The flames of love and rock n' roll.

Which takes away from the flow a little bit for me. That's all I meant. :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Oh... I see:) we can thank my phone for the formating problems. Thanks again:)

[RiverRei]

Haha darn phone!!! :P

[PonoEllis]

I agree with sereen, I like it, the fire is so much yet everything is so little

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thanks. :) I'm glad you people like it.

[PonoEllis]

np :) I promise to read more in my spare time, need to work more on my book and post more of its chapters first tho

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Ok. I'll read your book when I have time. :)

[PonoEllis]

then youd be the first :) and I thank you in advance

[sereenaoutloud]

you can really feel what you write as you read this! its strong!
"The only thing keeping my dead soul alive, the flames of love,
and hell."
Especially liked this line.!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thanks :) I wanted to write rock 'n roll instead of Hell but eh... that would be boring.

[sereenaoutloud]

lol well it works!

[alf]

Hi Infernal Machine. With so much pent up passion, the question I ask is what will you do with it? There's a whole lot of fire happening, but what fuel will keep if flaring? I do like it, now I want to see where it goes, alf

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Its fueled by love, and rock 'n roll. Thanks for reviewing. :)

[andrew mitchell]

everyone has a desire, a fire within that doesn't burn out and continues to inflame . captured beautifully in your write. well done.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thanks :) :) :) :) :)