Those eyes, that make the world go around...

Thanks for reading :)

Blue eyes,
colder than ice,
greater than oceans,
more beautiful than the skies,
wilder than the greatest winds,
all for love, they give the hints,
with every look.
Can be read like a book.
The eyes color the skies, to blue, and
my face to red.
I feel like a book,
yes I've been read.
That look, that joyfull look, makes the world go around, and me to look deeper, as they are my hearts keeper.

Author's Note

Thank you for reading. Any thoughts are welcome :)

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

Hi IM Very nicely said. I like the lines' all for love, they give the hints with every look. Yes the eyes are the gateway to a person's soul. and just a twinkle can give a hint of love or they can become as cold as ice . When eyes are framed by mascara and blue shadow eyeliners I find this only highlights what you can read between the lines of those eyes. A nice write I enjoyed this and I don't know what's going on but I too are composing a poem on blue eyes lol and I read another the other day. Must be the month of eyes. andrew

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Hehe:) month of eyes:) could be. Thanks for reviewing. :)

[Jamestown]

Beautiful write! Very sweet sentiment, always curious to see what people
have to say about eyes, I love eyes and to hear other people's perspective
is cool , thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thanks! :) I'm happy to see that people like it. :)

[luvs2write]

Eyes...such strange little things. They can tell you so much about a person, what mood they're in, what they're thinking (if they're thinking...lol). I really like the image with this poem. It's short, but I feel like that just makes it even more powerful. Great work with this one. Keep writing!!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thanks for reading and reviewing. :)

[luvs2write]

Yup. =) Thanks for sharing...

[Octavious]

I think this was very well written, short and to the point. Each word used was important in some way and carried a piece of sentimental value, so great job on that. Thank you fro sharing your works.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thanks for reviewing. Seems to me, that you got the point of the poem. :)

[Octavious]

I enjoyed the theme line of referring to being read as book, and describing your face turning red because you notice that you are being read as a book. I think that was very smart of you :)

[RiverRei]

I loved this. I've fallen in love with this poem. I'm mesmerized by it and want to read more!!! Makes me want to look into the eyes you describe so I can feel what you describe. Wonderful, thank you for sharing this. I want to read more!!! Haha :)

My only suggestion would be a formatting thing...I think the last line can be cut into 4 separate lines and it would keep your lovely formatting, as well as maintain the flow. Just to make it more clear, this is how I would format the last line:

"That look,that joyful look,
makes the world go round,
and me to look deeper,
as they are my harts keeper."

Just a suggestion, you don't have to do it :) Overall, I'm in love with this. Please write more of this for my reading pleasure :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

I'll try that. Thank you! :)

[RiverRei]

You are very welcome :)