ETERNAL LOVE

Leave My heart open
And ready to fall again
Remembering those pain
Still to overcome..
A voice inside of me
Said be aware your repeating a mistake
I warned my heart
But it cheated me like always..

Voices were quite
I only see sillhouette
Love is ephemeral or eternal?
I have become enslave of my own emotions
That incident trapped by soul
And torned my heart into peices..
I am convincing my mind to forget it
Thought another shot of whisky will do it..
But Her eyes nd smile more i missed
Hormones racing with every quarter i hv finished...

Struggling and fighting I fall asleep
She appears in my dream and i believe
Am i a weaker man or
Is this event driving me insane?
Finally my heart whispers me the answer
That i have learned to love again...

Reviews

[Anindita Janhabee]

Sometimes life plays irrelevant and unfair games with us... many fail, few win, but the ones who fail remain the strongest of all because they keep committing mistakes and then keep learning...
another situation, when people repeat their mistakes... even I have repeatedly done a mistake twice... honestly, my greatest mistakes of life... but one day or another, u hv to move, time never stops and along with it, u have to move on...
it's really very difficult, but one must remember, difficulties lead to success and peace, no one can attain intense satisfaction without having difficulties... many great leaders are great leaders because they conquered their difficulties..
thanks for making me realize all this through ur poem... I liked it very much!!!
Anindita : )

[danish]

i am glad that u like it!!! anindita

[Saddam]

Said be aware your repeating a mistake
I warned my heart
But it cheated me like always..
This is very nice and sensual poem my friend. A true of love insane. Great read and write.

[danish]

Thanks yar for the review..

[Saddam]

you are welcome dear.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Really enjoyed the progression of this piece, and you closed it with a heavy tangible line. Well done.

[danish]

Thank you very much..

[LadyAnn68]

I did not expect that ending.... I like the ending more than the beginning...especially the intake of whiskey to drown out whatever is the emotion at the moment.

[danish]

Well thank you

[Baby Ricochet]

Raw and emotional. Good poem

[danish]

Thank you ricochet..

[Sami Khalil]

Emotions are powerful , imagery are splendid...Bravo...................

[danish]

Thank you sami..

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome....:)...........................

[jacob erin-cilberto]

does need some editing, but some strong emotion pours from this...and that question of love...short term or long term?

we have to try in order to find out...some of us have experienced the ephemeral too often and now just feel that it is going to be that way all the time...but there is hope.

[danish]

Thanks you jacob..

[chaotic katie]

Such powerful and relatable emotion, fantastic job, I enjoyed reading it.

[danish]

Hey thanx for that katie..