falling for cupid chapter 1~2

Falling for cupid

(1)

I’m in my room crying over my broken heart, I slept with my boyfriend Luke yesterday (I was drunk and *in love* for the eight time) good thing we used protection. Luke was threatening to break up with me if we didn’t do it, so at the party I did it, and after that he broke up with me because I wasn’t his type. I begged him to go out with me again that night but he laughed. So that brings me back to now, I’m crying like the idiot I am, I went to the bathroom and scared myself to death with my reflection “damn I look like hell” I whispered and undressed. I’m Cady Suarez I’m 17 years old, my hair reaches my elbows and its dark black and its super curly, I have brown eyes and I’m a freshman loser who got tricked by a sophomore football player to have sex. A tear slipped my red eyes and I wiped it away, I got out of the shower and got dressed, I put on my black short shorts and black polo (I’m starting to wear everything black starting today), I walked downstairs and ate a granola bar, I could do anything I wanted cause my parents were always away on business and they could care less about me. I got in my car and drove to school, everyone was staring at me and giving me the *she’s a s**t* look, I got to my locker and my best friend Kate came over to me “you had sex with Damien!” she whisper yelled “yes and I regret it” I replied “well he’s telling everyone that it was lousy sex” she shot back “Kate pleas— I started to apologize but she cut me off “no look cady you’ve had sex with eight guys, and your always regretting it after they dump you” she raise her voice now “I’m sorry but I cant be friends with a s**t!” everyone including her laughed.

(2)

My eyes got watery and I ran out of school bumping into someone “I’m sorry” I said and got in my car, I drove home and called my mom

“Mom” I said

“Yes sweetie” she answered

“um I cant go to school next week because I injured my arm at home so can you call school from over there and tell them I’m gonna be absent”. I sighed

“Yeah sure ill call them later, I gotta go now hun okay bye take care” she said and hanged up

“B***h’” I muttered and got up, so I went downstairs and watched TV. There was a note in my skirts pocket, I looked at it and read it out loud

"Ill help you find true love and the love I find you will be different, say these words and ill be there__ truly yours cupid" i finished  

“Woah” I said and sighed, a cute guy popped up in front of me.”AAAAAAAA!!!’ I screamed and slapped him for the simple reason HE POPPED INTO MY HOUSE! “OW!!!!!!!” he yelled back and then he sat next to me “who are you?” I asked him standing up “well, I’m cupid, the one you bumped into at the school parking lot and the one who’s gonna help you find true love” he replied and my jaw dropped.

Author's Note

srry if i has bad grammar and i hope you like it (if you dont im srry)

Reviews

[Brooke]

Pretty cool, with the exception of some run-on-sentences and pincuation errors, I liked it.
You might want to start a new paragraph when you have dialogue, too. It makes the writing neater. =)

[Frog Girl]

You have such a weird perspective..........i's unique

[Caroline]

"So that brings me back to now, I'm crying like the idiot I am, I went to the bathroom and scared myself to death with my reflection "damn I look like hell" I whispered and undressed."

That is a run on sentence. I noticed you have a lot of those in there. Other than some punctuation I really enjoyed it.