He Writes His Sorrows In A List

He writes his sorrows in a list
One word at a time
A monosyllabic memorial
To his pain

Accounting for every moment
Every person who walked away
Every mistaken friendship
Every invisible soul
Every chance to grow
Every reason not to
Every grief ungrieved
Every hidden smile

We all lose things in our lives
Our self- inventories crumble
Upon themselves slowly
Like dust at our feet
Covering up what we used to be
Who we used to know
What we used to feel

All of the unsaid goodbyes

Reviews

[Kelly Scheppers]

It's the unsaid goodbyes that get me.

This reads like an arrow to the heart for me. It makes me think of how our lives effect each other, no matter how great the distance.

It's deep, it's poignant, and it made me think. That's pretty heavy for five minutes!

[daninstockholm]

Bingo,, that was the hammer line for me too,, at that point I realized it was indeed done.. Thank you, Kelly for your kind comments,, Glad you liked it!!

[Cody Jeremy Thompson]

I like the way everything kind of builds up for the last verse which makes it even more beautiful and emotional

[daninstockholm]

Thank you so much, Cody. I appreciate it very much!

[Autumn Lyric]

I have to admit that I have spent a majority of my own life logging away the sorrows, only to use them later in poetic expressions. Thought-provoking work here...

[daninstockholm]

Thank you, LaShaye,, for your thoughtful and kind review.. I always appreciate reviews of my work,, it's how i learn.. so please keep them coming!

[Mari K]

This is beautiful. It captures the necessity people feel to control things and hold on to things that simply aren't meant to be kept. Its sad and lonely and true. Awesome job.

[daninstockholm]

Thank you so much!! You really got what i was writing about.

[An owl on the moon]

Beautifully bittersweet words tracing life over all these endless glimpses and emotions and connections. Letting go is never easy, and saying goodbyes can bring unending pain. So powerfully spoken.

[daninstockholm]

Thank you very much. It can be painful, and quite difficult indeed to let go. I appreciate your kind words very much!

[~]

And what a sobering list it is.. Your pen has summed up the debts of all kinds of goodbyes, including those that are never uttered.

well done Dan :D

[daninstockholm]

Thank you so much for your kind words!!

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5 minutes can be more enough create great monument. And you did. I wonder how much pain exist on this world. If somebody can weight this heavy stuff. Is there any god. Poetry go to straight to my blood and flesh. Strong and gentle.

[daninstockholm]

Thank you so much, Marketa,, this means a great deal to me. I'm very happy you liked it!!

[daninstockholm]

not too awful for a 5 minute poem,, i guess,, I'd LOVE to get some more critique!!

[jeannemarie coulter]

powerful and very thought provoking poem...well penned, indeed...

[daninstockholm]

Thank you very much!!

[daninstockholm]

jeannemarie,, i was in a hurry when i wrote the earlier reply.. so you get a better one now,, lol,, I love it that you and Marketa and Kelly think of it as thought provoking,, to me that is my biggest goal as a poet, to make the reader think,, Poetry isn't always about the writers feelings only, but an often deep conversation into the souls of poet and reader,, Thank you so much!!