Rap Song?

rap

And id say i love to smile,
Love to make people smile
I like them to stay for a while,
Cause when im alone i just
feel so prone to all my thoughts
and emotions, all the reality
and the painful notions.
And technology is just cold,
making empty promises it cant uphold.
And nothing can save me now,
Not even my cellular phone. 
And these words are straight down to the bone.

And i cant change the way i am,
cant change this traffic jam
of words, of tears, of pain.
Mundane thoughts i just
want to rearrange, want to
sustain with the essence
of life before i go insane.
I'm sure this decree doesnt
make any sense to you,
but it makes all the world to me. 
So keep walking, keep stepping
in the right direction before
the projection of my infection
decides to make its selection
and holds you down to look
at your own broken reflection.
So, tie me to the wooden chair.
I'm more than aware of what
you forswear, and i wont prepare
for the acid you dropped in my
eyes to make allies with the blind,
and to make the skies undefined,
cause i dont have your sight
and what you see is always right,
apparently.
Cause if you dont have your sight
things can never be quite right,
And you'll never have to wake up
in the middle of the night, 
Never have to worry about the height,
up to high down too low,
friend or a foe no one will
ever know. i just hope you
dont push me off the top
cause the falls just gonna
be non stop, down the to
bottom down to the ground.
I love these words
their my release, my savior, my one
and only --with this paper and pen
ill never be lonely.

Reviews

[Im His Daughter]

i dont know if this one would be a rap song.. maybe if you changed the ways it was punctuated, or split the writing up more into smaller paragraphs.. i know that you wrote some others that were shorter that took on the right feel from the get go, to be a rap song. i thnk this is just more of a poem in my eyes, but then again what do i know know.. You do have talent tho in writing.. good job

[DamienHino]

good job.