Confused

and its a pen with a knife at the end

and its drawing a never ending line

of blood and ashes and wine

twisting and turning inside out

tears and pain ruin the drought,

and all the while rose petals blind

making every single word undefined

and im just falling down and down.

smiling aches, no more frowns

a shaved head with nothing to hide

skin to pavement, a beautiful collide

silent and severe it rained that night

as a burnt heart only knew to ignite.

Reviews

[Daniielle7]

thanks everyone! :)

[Stephanie]

I love this! Very good job!

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

You're portraying the emotions very well here with some good images to help heighten the ideas. Although the ending rhymes it works and leaves it on a good note to conclude the turmoil.

[Brian W. Hastings]

First off let me just say wow. I really liked this. I love the imagery and the word play. It is very excellently pulled together and the whole thing just has that right feel - at least for me.