The Final Goodnight

A tribute to my loving, but flawed, biological parents. Rest in peace

The Final Goodnight

In every confession was contrition

For your negligence and addiction

In every conviction was compassion

For I could see in your exhaustion

The desire to drench your soul in salvation

Chiseling out this final goodnight

Are mossy memories you glazed in starlight

Chiseling out this final sleep tight

Are the limericks you etched into the night

Despite the darkness with which you were forced to fight

May my rites release your mind at last

From the phantasms that pervade your past

May my rites relieve your heart of ash

So it will never again throb and thrash

Cut through those threads of threnody

That choke off your rivers of rhapsody

For your sins I have forgiven

So that you can find your home in Heaven

In loving memory of my biological parents.  You may not have been the best parents, but I know that you both did want to overcome your flaws so that you could be.  I forgive you, and will always love you.  May my words help both of you rest in peace.

Author's Note

I've been trying to write again for about three months now, but haven't been able to find my words up until this bittersweet moment. I sat down, laboring over this piece for many hours for many days, determined to fight through my writer's block in order to write what I felt was necessary for me to write.

Anyway, I still don't know when I'll be posting anything again. Hopefully I'll write something before another three months have passed, but we'll have to see. As always, thanks for reading (the few of you that actually still read my writing XD), have a fantastic day, and I'll see you next time!! :)

Reviews

[θεά]

This must have been such a difficult write. Deeply personal and heartfelt, your note reeks of pathos and courage at the same time. I am sorry for your loss and I truly hope writing this has yielded you some form of catharsis.

Take care.

Best,
M.

[DoormanDan]

This was definitely difficult for me to write, there is no doubt. Thank you so much for your kind words, and for reading this. Writing has, for sure, given me some catharsis, and continues to do so :)

[PandaPeaceful]

Forgiveness is something only few of us can grant, for many times pride envelops us. But this poem delivers waves of strength and bravery. Your lines are filled with beauty and thought. Although you have departed and partly returned to your writing experience, I am greatly excited to see what else you create (Someday).

[DoormanDan]

Well, you shouldn't have to wait too long, because, after five months of no writing, I have returned! Thank you so much for your kind words on my writing :)

[PandaPeaceful]

That's great! It was a pleasure.

[barleygirl]

Good job of accomplishing your goal -- honoring parents despite their considerable flaws. To me, forgiveness is a gift we give ourselves, so we can stop grinding on the shortcomings. I have a similar story & there are always advantages that come with learning to live a broken life. Your sincerity shines thru & I hope you get your writing mojo back on a regular basis! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[DoormanDan]

Thank yo so much for reading and sharing your thoughts on this. I appreciate it. Don't worry, my writing mojo has, mostly, returned, even though it took around five months to do so!! :)

[barleygirl]

Yippee! *smile*

[Dave]

This is a powerful tribute of forgiveness to those who, I assume, did not care and nurture you as perhaps they should have. I know whereof you speak, but I, as yet, haven't reached your point of forgiveness.

Take care - Dave

[DoormanDan]

You would be correct in your assumption. They were not the best parents by any means. However, by nature, I'm a person who prefers to forgive and carry on. It doesn't do me much of any good to hold any grudges. I'm certain you'll be able to reach that point of forgiveness someday as well. Thank you so much for reading my work. I'm happy you enjoyed it. :)

[Dave]

Both of mt parents are gone and I don't hold any grudges. I must say that on reflection I can understand some of the behavior, especially on the part of my step-father.

Take care - Dave

[.]

A deep write, Dan, and one which speaks of heartfelt forgiveness.

Whatever transpired is a part of your life journey and by offering words like these you are walking your path with dignity and respect.

Some excellent use of language throughout this piece gives it a transcendental quality.

A true heart-on-the-sleeve write. Nicely conceived and executed. Well Done.

[DoormanDan]

Thank you so much for giving praise to this poem. I really do appreciate it :).

[Coyote Poetry]

The words honest and true. You allowed the reader to feel and understand a part of your life. A powerful and worthwhile write. I did liked the ending.
Coyote

[DoormanDan]

I'm happy to hear you liked the ending. Thank you for reading and sharing your opinion on this piece. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[apennylate]

Chiseling... A powerful sense of words and rhyme here, friend... An even more powerful tribute to memory... Hurtful or not, you have given it purpose with beautiful flow... Respectfully penned...

[DoormanDan]

Thank you very much for reading and sharing your thoughts on my writing. I honestly appreciate it. :)

[apennylate]

No problemo, sir, anytime