Three Cheers for the Failure

One of my most personal pieces to date

Before I begin, I just want to say that this poem is the first personal piece I have written in quite a while.  In my short life, I've come to realize that the a person can only pursue something for so long, and endure so many of society's storms, before their drive runs dry.  This is what happened to me.  Because my efforts hardly ever yielded any fruit, I ended up becoming apathetic and unconfident about many things.   That has changed though, because now I determined to help as many people as I can before the day I die.  I don't know with 100% certainty what awaits after death, but I'm sure as heck going to make sure I help this world as much as I can before I'm no longer able to.  Sorry if this piece isn't my best, I know a lot of the words that are in this piece have been used in some of my other lyrics(this is something I always try to avoid), but I seem to have lost my way with words, and am struggling to find it again.

P.S:  There is a deeper meaning behind the line "Three cheers for the failure".  I'll let you decide what it is.

Three Cheers for the Failure

Riots rise down inside me as the tremors intensify

My passion was traumatized, leaving me a bard bastardized

By a world swallowed whole by the Orchestra of Discord

But I've found the empathy that I lost long ago

Televised, terrorized, cauterized, desensitized, re-energized

Now I'll carry the sunrise, unafraid and inspired

Across skies winterized for those that I cherish

Never again will I perish

Clockwork paralyzed in horror watches as weary warriors

Close their eyes forever, souls sickened by Black Widow venom

All around, hallowed halos slowly crumble to the ground

But an empty shell I am no more

Televised, terrorized, cauterized, desensitized, re-energized

Now I'll carry the sunrise, unafraid and inspired

Across skies winterized for those that I cherish

Never again will I perish

Into the incubus I dive, my heart burning with tranquil rage

For the harlequins and savages that incarcerated me in darkness

Now I am the rip-tide, I have freed myself from these chains

And now as I listen to the constellations, I'm no longer a broken man

Now I'll carry the sunrise, unafraid and inspired

Across skies winterized for those that I cherish

Never again will I perish

Televised, terrorized, cauterized, desensitized, re-energized

Three cheers for the failure!  Three cheers for the failure!

With a dilated mind, my hands held high into the sky

Three cheers for the failure!  Three cheers for the failure!

I laugh, smile and cry, for once more I feel so alive 

Author's Note

Writer's block still has me by the throat, so I apologize if this isn't up to my usual standards. You can't win them all, so oh well. Tell me what you think! :)

Reviews

[Aries1984]

Although I have my own opinion of what you may possibly mean by "three cheers for the failure" I'm just going to leave that for more open interpretation by not posting what I think it is. But in some ways I feel like I have been in that spot before in my life as well.

I've also been feeling more emotional this month. A year ago this month, the news of my dad's terminal cancer really, and I mean REALLY started to sink in. He died 5 months later. So this is the first holiday season that I'm having without my dad and the depression I experienced last year, this feeling of hopelessness, has been really hitting me again this year.

On top of feeling depressed, I have to deal with the holiday craze at work. I'm a Christian, and you really have no clue how much I hate what people turned this season into. I look at my own family, because of consumerism, living paycheck to paycheck, I'm not even able to spend the holiday like I once used to.

All of this also got me thinking about how I'd much rather go out there and help the homeless. Help other people. After all that's what this season is all about. I know that this is what my dad would have wanted me to do as well. So starting next year, I'm hoping to be a bit more involved in my community here in Seattle. And I hope to start a trend in my family with this too.

[DoormanDan]

It seems like you have had quite a year. I'm really sorry to hear about your dad's death. I know how you feel, because I lost my birth dad to Lung Cancer back in 2011. It really hits hard when things like that happen, but life always gets better given time and mourning.

I also wish I could be out in the world, helping others in any way I can, but I'm sadly confined because of school and college right now. My number one goal in life is too one day make a difference, whether it be big or small. Thanks for reviewing. Take care :)

[Nightfeather]

Your poems bears much relatable truth, for i have also been struck by writers's block. It's a nice poem and I find it great :D

[DoormanDan]

Writer's block stinks, but I think I'm finally starting to get over it. Thanks for the reviewing Nightfeather :)

[Art Sun]

nice work, interestingly failure is the beginning of success, although we might not look at it this way it also means the end of something that did not succeed, kind of a twist to reality, but anyways a nice poetic expresion of emotion...nice...

[DoormanDan]

This is some I came up with for failure, "It's true that our wall is painted by our success, but it is our failures that build the wall in the first place". I live by that rule. Thanks for reviewing :)

[AaronFreitas]

This is an awesome piece buddy! I was wondering why I hadn't seen any requests for you and add that to being behind... I finally got to it. I wasn't let down... I always enjoy your thoughts. Find motivation where ever it will come from :)

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for reviewing Aaron, I'm relieved to hear that you think this is up to par with my usual standards. The reason you haven't been getting many requests from me is because I've been writing less and less. To me(for now at least), writing is beginning to lose its magic, and I'm really considering just putting down the pencil and closing the notebook for a while. I don't know when inspiration will come next, but I'll post what I write on here if it meets my standards. :)

[AaronFreitas]

I hear ya buddy... I didn't write for... around six years. Just kind of stopped and came back to writing at the end of last year. I get the same where it just kind of loses it's edge and I lose my excitement about sitting down to write but when you can focus and let those thoughts flow it's so much fun. Take your time... write on your terms :)

[Amber Lily]

Oh Dan, it's like every time you say it might not be that great that I know it will be great lol. It's hard as a writer to write something, and see it as it's own piece separate from your other work. Or to even see the true greatness within it. I've come across this as well when I'm writing my book. But then when a readers eyes hit your work they can tell you great things about your piece that you've never even noticed.
This piece has a very 'reborn' feeling to it. Like you just came across some kind of great realization and have decided to work better or harder at something.
Indeed it is hard to see all that is wrong in the world and believe that you, as one person, could make a difference. But that's how it always starts. One person gets a vision of a better world, and by working towards that world others are inspired by you along the way. It may not even be a difference you can see right away, but over time you could see the impact you have made.
A very inspirational piece of work here Dan. Well done :)

[DoormanDan]

I think my main problem with telling what's good and not good in my own work is my addiction to being as creative as possible. I try my best to make each piece I write alien to the previous one in concept, wordage and style. I find that if I don't satisfy those rules I've set up for myself, then I haven't done the best I can possibly do. Lately, I've found that songwriting is beginning to lose its magic, which has made writing even more arduous for me. I don't know how long this phase will last, but I'm thinking that I'm going to put the pencil paper away for a while so I can explore my own abilities more and find other things that I'm good at. Thanks for reviewing Amber :)

[Amber Lily]

This is true, sometimes writers just need a break and figure some things out. After a while you might find that you miss it and then create a masterpiece! Your you'll find out your good at something else and get super rich, whichever works :)

[Valentine]

I often think our hardest critic is ourselves. Do not always try to top someone else, be yourself, we all have something different to offer. That is what makes reading on here so great. we see others thoughts and feelings. I get bored with just my own. Valentine

[J Lee]

Jeez, this is really the greatist thing I've read in a while. I love it.

[DoormanDan]

Well, I'm honored by your approval J Lee, I'm really glad you like this. Thanks for reviewing :)

[Emily]

I really do like this one!
Keep up writing!

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for the review Emily :)

[Bear]

I don't mean to sound like a know it all but I want you to think about what you just said in your authors note. Much of the time the problem is not being able to think of something to write, it is that people think noting they write is good enough so they either stop trying or don't finish what they do start to write. Your author's note says that may be something you should consider. If you can think then you have things to write about, you may just think they are not good enough topics. I don't know if this helped but I hope it didn't offend.

[DoormanDan]

No offense taken, don't worry. The reason I said that I still have writer's block is because the last few things I've written have taken a great deal more time than usual, I scrapped original copies of them multiple times(something I never usually do, usually every song from me you see is the first copy that I wrote in one sitting), I had a hard time thinking of the words, lines, and literary devices to use. To top it all off, the time between each piece I've written lately has been far greater than usually is. I've had inspiration (insert unnecessary hyperbole here) of times, but have only gotten something written a few times. When I finished writing this piece, I thought that some of my words were poorly chosen, and that I've recycled a few more words than usual from other pieces of mine(this is something I absolutely can't stand doing), so I was not at all satisfied. These things, to me, are all symptoms of writer's block, because they all made the writing process longer, harder, and less satisfactory. Sorry about the llllloooonnnnnnngggg reply, but I hope that cleared things up. Thanks for reviewing, I really appreciate it :)

[Bear]

Any exchange of ideas, thought processes and understandings is a great thing to me, it may help me or the next person who comes along to find and answer of our own hiding in plain sight between the lines so thank you for spreading the understanding around :~)

[Lizardo]

You made this amazing piece and you have Writers block? I write my poems choppier and awful and don't even have writers block! haha lol
What an awesome piece of writing and I can see the meaning behind this poem, the wording that you used, the rhyme and flow of the poem, its like I was travelling on some kind of of astral plane where you where telling the poem and I was just floating around. Life is hard and I do know that pretty well, but we have to get up and keep going, Like Jesus says in the bible, if you fall 7,000 times get back up 7,000 times. Failure, such a thing that we never want to mess with but yet with mess with it all of the time! inded if I were to say cheers for the failure, it would be because when you fail, you learn something new and you grow from those experiences too.
Awesome poem Dan, It's really cool and I really like your writing. 100% Rating
(P.S: I'm starting to review more in-depth in the writings)

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for reviewing Lizardo! You are definitely right about why somebody would say "Three cheers for the failure". That wasn't exactly the meaning I was implying, but who cares? In the end, it's all about viewpoints. I'm really glad you liked this. :)