Awaken the Guardian

Easily the quirkiest poem I have ever written.

So I decided to write an acrostic poem using the letters of the alphabet.  Simple enough, yes, but here's where the twist comes in; each line can only contain words that begin with the letter the line began with(the first line begins with A, therefore all of the words in that line must begin with A).  On top of that, I attempted to make a story with this poem at the same time.  I've never spent more time on a poem than I have with this one, and I personally think that the end result wasn't worth the effort, but I decided to post it on the site anyway.  It may not seem like it, but there is a story in this poem, and I carefully choose each and every word so that it makes sense in some sense in this poem(some of them are used a symbolism to get the job done in this piece).  I know that some areas may not flow well, but it's hard to do in a poem like this.  Without further delay, I present to you....whatever the heck this is that I just wrote.  I do hope you enjoy it, but please feel free to be honest if you don't.  Tell me what you think the story is in this! :)

Awaken the Guardian

Aflame Arcadia awakens aggrieving affliction

Behaving beyond blasphemously

Comatose creation carrying constant confliction

Deprecate dream desires derelict

Evoke extravert evolution, exorcize execution

Forever follow flyleaf fields

Guard, guide, glow, gloss, glorify globally

Hummingbird harvesting Heaven

Instigate infinite incandescent insurgence

Jumpstart Jupiter, jovial Juniper

Kindle kinetic kindness, kaleidoscopic knight

Lament love lost, let life's lantern

Massacre matte music, meliorate matrixes

November night nova now nuanced

Oneness oncoming out of ominous omnibus

Pacifier, paint panchromatic patterns

Quaint quantum, quest, quit quiescence

Rain, reticent, raiment, radiate recourse

Society's salvation sleeps, sculpted shrouded

Till tangible tranquility touches the terrain

Until universal unity unravels unto us

Vaporize violence, vanquish Vampires

Whimsical world warden, wild Wizard

Xenophobic xandria Xerox xenon

Yore youthful yearned, yowling "Yuletide!"

Zealous zither, zircon zodiac, zip zillion Zions 

So, what do you think the story is?  :)  

Author's Note

All I have to say is everything after V became an absolute nightmare for me to write because there were so few words for me to use. Anyway, tell me what you think! Was this worth the effort? :)

Reviews

[Maja]

My guess is the same as the Perkele dude. It's the night Jesus was born. :)) Yep, I can tell the last bits were a nightmare, but great job! You really poured your efforts here. Also, I really liked these lines:

"Society's salvation sleeps, sculpted shrouded
Till tangible tranquility touches the terrain
Until universal unity unravels unto us"

I think in the whole poem it was the bit that made most sense (at least to me) which is impressive since the poem looks highly complicated. Thank you for posting this! :)

[DoormanDan]

Like Perkele, you are right in some sense. It can be interpreted that way, but the story behind it that I came up with is somewhat different. Don't worry, unless you want me to tell you, I won't ruin the fun of speculation. Those lines were a few of the ones that really came easily to me(which is probably why they are easy to understand). Thanks for reviewing, I'm glad you like this! :)

[Maja]

Hmmm.. I will figure it out. :))

[WriterGirl101]

This is awesome, nice work.. You have great talent.. :)

[paulina misiewicz]

wow!!, well I must say I've read it from A to Z ;) like 10 times and each time the meaning seemed different to me, what a crazy and amazing poem you've produced, well done you !!

[Ellay]

I really like how you used the alphabet for an acrostic poem! Never thought of that before :) I cannot, however, interpret a meaning to the story as many stories have multiple meanings to them, and this feels like one of them. But overall, I loved this poem!

[Amber Lily]

Man that last part must have been a headache for you to write! You did a pretty good job though :) As far as the story goes nothing really came to mind for me, but that doesn't take away from it at all. You challenged yourself and the end result was interesting! I had to write a poem of this style once in 5th grade and... well to say the least I needed my parents help. A lot... lol. I believe my last word was "zzzzz" as in the sound a bee makes when it flies.
Your word choice was fantastic and it seems organized pretty well, this was a fun read :)

[DoormanDan]

Z was a complete nightmare, but the absolute worst part for me was X. The poem was very fun to write though, and I'm really glad that you like the final result. Thanks for reviewing Amber :)

[Amber Lily]

Always happy to review :)

[closed]

even though i cant give a good analysis as to its meaning
im glad i came across this one

i've been hoping to be inspired by new writing styles lately
and this poem is one of only a handful that have given me that inspiration


love how you put this together


-Dream

[DoormanDan]

Well I'm both really glad and honored that this poem has given you that inspiration Dream. I can't wait to see what work that inspiration brings out :)

[Cherrie Palmer]

Now I know this was a challenge . This was very enjoyable read.

[DoormanDan]

It was an absolute nightmare, but I still enjoyed writing it. Thanks for reviewing :)

[Mari K]

This is a difficult way of writing but I wouldn't call this piece a disaster. I think most wouldn't even attempt this kind of work because unless you have mastered it, one would feel that it doesn't highlight their ability. I was happy to see you had enough words for X!! Well done in spite of your hardship.

[DoormanDan]

X was an absolute nightmare for me. I had to rely on symbolism with the meaning of some of the words just to make it work(very obscure symbolism that probably nobody will figure out). Anyway, I'm glad that you think this wasn't a disaster. Thanks for reviewing :)

[RoiledKilt]

I always find alliteration to be an unique challenge. I'm often amazed by word selection and often wonder if there is meaning to it or did that particular word just seem to fit. Regardless, it always leaves it wide open for interpretation, which is, at least for me what makes it fun.

[DoormanDan]

One thing I make sure I incorporate into all of my songs and poems is alliteration. I also make sure I make plenty of use of assonance, personification, syntax, simile, metaphor, imagery and all of those other devices. You're right, it does make it fun. Thanks for reviewing :)

[Markius]

Ive never been good at poems or short writings, I cant seem to get the meanings across with so few words, as for this, I liked it, I doubt I would have known enough words for something like this. As for story I plan on puzzling it out a few more times before I venture and answer that question, I like it however.

[DoormanDan]

Getting meanings across concisely is something that just takes a bit of practice. I'm sure if you kept trying you'd get it down eventually. As far as words go, I had to rely heavily on a dictionary for this piece(more than I have for any other poem I've written). I find that challenges like this are both fun for me and help me improve my overall vocabulary. If you think you've figured out what the meaning is, please feel free to voice it. I love hearing other people's interpretations of things! :)

[Marcus K]

I think it was very much "worth the effort". Anything that stretches who we are and our skills/talents is a good thing, in my not-so-humble opinion? Some lines are tongue-tiers, but I think that just adds to it. I also enjoyed this because my newest piece is a type acrostic - just the first word ran alphabetically instead of the entire line. Still, it was an effort, so I definitely appreciate your work here!

[DoormanDan]

I agree with you, anything that tests our abilities is good for us. I'm really glad you like this, thanks for reviewing :)