Declared Deceased

Deals with the worst consequences bullying can have if it is left untreated

Please Read Before Reading The Song:

Hello everybody, I just wanted to let you know that the following song is really dark, and that there is a legitimate reason for this darkness.  I believe that while it's true that an effective way to help stop bullying is to focus solely on the victims, I also think that some focus should be put on what bullying could make those victims become-bullies themselves.  This song is written from the perspective of a victim of bullying who has given up on all that is good in the world, and has decided that the only way to get by in a world so harsh is to be every bit as harsh as the world is.  If we want to prevent people from becoming like this, we need to try as much as we can to end bullying.  I hope you enjoy this song, and I want to honestly know what you think of it.

Also, I tried actually writing rap verses in this song ,which is something I've never done before.  The rap parts will be the italicized lines, and the regular parts will be the italicized parts.  Please be honest about what you think of this :)

Declared Deceased 

They told me that I'm a disease and brought my life to its knees

God watched with calloused apathy as I crashed in an avalanche of debris

The betrayal drove this nail that has left me stone cold and frail

In the end Hate and pain prevail, while Love and Faith are the ones who fail

The saint that was inside of me has been declared deceased

I'll save myself from Society's lies, embrace the rampant rage inside

I know now that the kind and the weak will never claim victory

So I'll let what's left of my heart die and let the smoke and fire rise

Forever and ever I'll spread this cancer, only despair can bring rapture

Don't worry Mirror, I got your lecture letter telling me that I'm a failure

This age turns your life into world war III then dopes it up on LSD

By broadcasting you like NBC and destroying you with RPGs

So I have written a simple recipe perfect for eradicating dreams

Boil the weak and add a sprinkle of assault and pepper-spray

Tell me why I should fight the crime

When the wrong are far stronger than the right?!

Tonight I am switching sides and letting the innocent taste the Viper's bite

Tell me why I should fight the crime

When the wrong are far stronger than the right?!

I have opened my eyes and have realized the nice are always last in line

The saint that was inside of me has been declared deceased

I'll save myself from Society's lies, embrace the rampant rage inside

I know now that the kind and the weak will never claim victory

So I'll let what's left of my heart die and let the smoke and fire rise

I have been forsaken and maimed, shattered and betrayed

Son, you had better run, I'm mounting the Horses of Holocaust

You can pray to Heaven all you want but you cannot escape this onslaught

I have been forsaken and maimed, shattered and betrayed

Playing games with my prey is the only remedy for my pain

I'm gonna bring the rain and wash away this place that I have come to hate

The saint that was inside of me has been declared deceased

I'll save myself from Society's lies, embrace the rampant rage inside

I know now that the kind and the weak will never claim victory

So I'll let what's left of my heart die and let the smoke and fire rise

Author's Note

My goodness, I seriously gave myself a massive headache trying to write this one! I know this may not be my best piece, but I decided to post it because of how much fun I had writing it, and because I had a message I want to deliver: I am NOT going to EVER go mainstream(which is what I feel a lot of my songs have been lately) again! Please be honest in your opinions about this piece :)

Reviews

[613]

I understand your use of this phrase, "Horses of Holocaust" - maybe it's because I'm Jewish & a large portion of my family perished in the Holocaust or because I personally know survivors of the Holocaust but this really irked me. I don't know. Something doesn't really feel appropriate about associating "Holocaust" with anything other than the actual even of the Holocaust. Just bothers me a lot, no matter the content.

Nice work, nonetheless.

- Brittney

[DoormanDan]

I sincerely apologized if that line offended you, which the wasn't meant in any way, shape or form to do. It was just meant to be part of an attempt to open up the eyes of those oblivious to what bullying can really in the worst scenarios, and hopefully inspired people to try to stop it. I honestly cannot think of anything else to put there without changing the line altogether, which would be difficult for me to do because I gave myself a massive headache writing this and because I'm not really that good at writing rap verses in the first place.

So I sincerely apologize, really, if I offended you at all.

[613]

It's fine. You don't need to change it on my account. Haha. I was just expressing an opinion.

[Bear]

The word Holocaust comes from Latin and Greek around the year 1200 AD and has been used to explain everything from the Black plague of 1348 England to the events of world war 2. I only mention this because it is a Historical word that keeps the painful events of the past from being forgotten and should be used often. Thus the past is never forgotten and we learn from mans mistakes and never let them be repeated.

[B]

A beautiful write with a cause to fight for
How noble ...... I enjoyed every word and stand by your ideas very much so

I suffered bullying at some point in my life and never did i run to someone for help
I was threatened with a knife and i was a teenager...... i put my sleeves up and said bring it on
Lets fight ....

Human dignity is vital and must be preserved ..... i do not believe in fighting but when attacked openly to bring along humiliation to a human soul on a public base then a response is very much in dire need and in an urgent fashion

Once again Thank you for writing with purpose

[DoormanDan]

That's the same way I feel about fighting. Thank you so much for reviewing this :)

[closed]

this is so true to life

i think this is what happens to people in lots of situations
they become the very thing that oppressed them

i think you're good at using rap lyrics to tell a story
i think you should try it more often

this was really awesome


-Dream

[DoormanDan]

I'm glad that somebody understood what I was trying to say(I was afraid people would take this song as something really bad). It's good to know that the rap parts aren't horrible, and it was extremely fun to write, but my God this one gave me the worst headache I've ever gotten from writing a song! lol. Thanks for reviewing Literary Artist Dream :)

[closed]

oh wow
did it?

it shows
you worked really hard on it it seems
read moreoh wow
did it?

it shows
you worked really hard on it it seems

and no problem at all Dan

[closed]

ignore the technical glitch
it seems to be prevalent here

i wrote more but it wont show

[DoormanDan]

Well, it's all in the name of creativity and varieyt, I say:)