Metamorphosis

For that moment when we have to leave the wonders of childhood behind and embrace adulthood

Metamorphosis

Once upon a time I played games with Snow-White and Rose-Red

Every day we'd race through clandestine cotton candy caves

But to their enchanting eyes I find I must now say goodbye

The Earth has let her violet veil gently fall to the floor

But as I stood on the rooftop, I heard the clock saying, "Tick-tock"

And now I know I must not let myself be run through with rot

So although I mourn for the lovely burden I've lost

I will march on

Tonight I'll break out of this cocoon

And tomorrow I'll fan the flames of the sun, brave the dark side of the moon

With both Yin and Yang I'll fly away

Into a sky of storm clouds and Nightingales, flyleaf dreams and steady rain

Unafraid

Author's Note

This idea was one that was sitting in my mind for many months, but up until now I just couldn't find the words to write it. I believe that the transition from being a child to being and adult can be seen as being a sad, a happy, an uncertain, and a strange moment all at once, and I tried to incorporate all of those emotions into this poem in some way. I don't know if I succeeded or not, so please tell me if you think I did or not! Also, there is symbolism in the colors I used for this poem, can you figure out what they symbolize? :)

Reviews

[jeannemarie coulter]

marvelouse use of words and color to show our movement and change as we age...well penned indeed...

[DoormanDan]

Thank you for the positive remarks, I'm really glad you liked this poem :)

[jeannemarie coulter]

it is lovely start to finish

[Stephen]

Wow..you did a nice job on this one as well. I really liked. I think you did a great job describing our transition from childhood to adulthood. I applaud you. Thanks for sharing friend

[DoormanDan]

This was a piece I wanted to write really badly, but it took forever for me to have that "aha!" moment. I'm glad it was worth the wait though, thanks for reviewing :)

[Relic]

It is a sad transition to go from childhood to adult but we all must cross that threshold. The safety we find in stories is always comforting because most times, the story has a happy ending. Real life, on the other hand continues and it is up to us to make the story and its ending a happy one.

[DoormanDan]

You are absolutely right, we are the only ones that can(to some extent), make that tradition of Fairytales a reality. Thanks for reviewing this :)

[Amber Lily]

Very relatable! We all go through this sometime and it can be very confusing at first. We may want to run backwards, but once we go forward there's no going back. But the memories are still there and who knows, maybe something you did as a child will inspire you for your future. This was really thought provoking!

I'm not sure what the specific colors mean, but I do notice that as a child everything seems so colorful and full of life. And as an adult we realize how dull and boring the real world can be. That is, if we let it :)

[DoormanDan]

You are absolutely right about it being very confusing. The colors are suppose to symbolize the transition from childhood(colorful) to adulthood(black). Thanks for reviewing this Amber :)

[closed]

you have one of the most distinct writing styles here Dan

and like others I have read from you
this is a very unique and colorful write

that is remarkably, and unmistakably you


-Dream

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for the compliment on my writing style. For as long as I've been writing, I've been trying to make my writing stand out as much as I could. Lately though, I've found that I've wanted to not have a specified style, but rather write songs belonging to every genre I can. The next idea in my head(which I may or may not actually write) will be one that blends almost all(if not all) of the genres I have written in the past into one gigantic song. Hopefully it turns out alright! Thanks for reviewing this Dream., I'm glad you like it :)

[closed]

sure thing Dan

and sweet
that should be fun to see

i'll bet that will turn out amazing
i'll be looking out for that one for sure^

[Willard Wells]

Well I popped over to see what you had and I selected blindly and then saw the name and had to check since I have read another of the same name in the last week.

They are similar only in the concept. Yours just as beautiful as the other yet more direct. i liked it.

I have felt for some time that all words and even pictures have been done. To continue to repeat words is found in how differently the same words can be said and reach someone not reached previously.

Thank you for sharing your work.

[DoormanDan]

Well, I'm glad to know that you thought this one was just as beautiful as the other poem you read. Thanks for reviewing this :)

[Willard Wells]

My reference was not meant to lesser your work. The name had just stuck in my head. Your work to me was from the aspect of transformation of the moth. The other was a comparison to a moth in the transition of someone leaving home.

[Lizardo]

You know this is really one of your best Dan, I just love it!
The colors? hmmm maybe the name metarphosis has to do with the change of state in our emotions growin up?
Really good poem Dan, IT is really good !

[DoormanDan]

Thanks Lizardo, and you nailed it with what the colors mean! I think you might like my latest song called Declared Deceased. I go full out Linkin Park on it :)

[Ashadan]

You are right in there. I got your point. thanks for sharing and truly worth reading for =)

[DoormanDan]

Thank you for the review, I'm glad you like it :)

[Katie]

I really love this poem and some of it has to do with the fact that I love almost anything that starts with "once upon a time".
Getting past that I think that you captured the transition in a wonderful way. I think you succeeded and also keep up the great work!:)
Here is a random quote
"Today you are you that is truer than true there is no one alive. who is youer than you."
Dr. Seuss

[DoormanDan]

I like that quote, I'll be sure to remember it! Thanks for reviewing :)

[Valentine]

Something all have to face at this point in their lives. I would hope that all young people turn into adulthood without the chains of any addiction that can lead to destruction instead of fulfilled hopes and dreams. Valentine

[DoormanDan]

I hope the same as well, but unfortunately that isn't always the case. Thanks for reviewing :)