Cirque de Peculiar

WARNING: This song has what I consider to be a very adult, dark, psychopath theme to it!

Cirque de Peculiar

Intro:

(Ladies and gentlemen, boys and girls

Step right inside to see the out-of-this-world!

Within this tent you'll find wondrous things

This is the Cirque de Peculiar, home of the strange!!)

Song:

Every hour, every minute, I find myself trapped in a whirlwind

Of never-ending sickness, every thought is met with second guesses

Ashes! Ashes! Slowly I fall down!

I clutch my crooked cures, seeking freedom from my paranoia

For I can't bear it anymore, this storm surge of hysteria

With every moment I descend further into this abyss

These demons, they won't relent, the crystal ball has been broken

In desperation, I seek salvation in a magenta sky of candy clouds

But as the illusion is concluded, I'm left screaming for a way out

Mayday! Mayday! The ship is slowly sinking!

Something save me from this, put me in a state of psychosis

To pull me from the whispers of this malevolent hypnosis

With every moment I descend further into this abyss

These demons, they won't relent, the crystal ball has been broken

A flash flood of anxiety is drowning me in deadly disease

Can somebody rescue me from the skeletons haunting my dreams?!

Ashes! Ashes!  Mama, we all go to hell!

Mayday! Mayday! Never mind, everything is fine

They don't end, the hallucinations, they're such beautiful creations

My endless hyperventilation is such an euphoric sensation

(Don't save me!  Don't save me!)

Crooked cures, paranoia, storm surge of hysteria

(Everything is alright!)

(Don't save me! Don't save me!)

Anxiety, deadly disease, skeletons haunting my dreams

(Everything is alright!)

With every moment I descend further into this abyss

(Laladada, fe-fi-fo-fum!)

These demons, they won't relent, the crystal ball has been broken

(Merry Christmas to all and to all a good night!)

A flash flood of anxiety is drowning me in deadly disease

(Ladies and gentlemen, boys and girls...)

Nobody can rescue me from the skeletons haunting my dreams!

(...Your are all going to have a fantastic time!)

Outro:

(...We are live at the Cirque de Peculiar...)

(...With a truly disturbing discovery at the Cirque de Peculiar...)

(...Police have confirmed that, altogether, 51 adults and children have been killed, many more seriously injured, and three children are missing...)

(...It is now being called one of the biggest mass murders in recent years...)

(...The Ringmaster, who is suspected to be behind the killing, has yet to be found...)

(...Police are unsure as to what his motives were for this crime.  If you have seen this man, or these children, please contact authorities immediately...)

Author's Note

GGGGGGGHHHHHHHHHHAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!! Writer's block and school keep on preventing me from writing! Any way, please tell me what you think of this :)

Reviews

[jeannemarie coulter]

followed through your glass darkly...found pieces of broken artists everywhere...reminds me of a picasso painting with pieces of the model all over the room connected yet not connected...

[DoormanDan]

Picasso was a great artist, and I'm humbled that my song here reminded you of one of his pieces. Thanks for reviewing :)

[armin]

Dark writing is difficult ,certainly not my cup of tea but I enjoyed the storyline here.

armin. ...

[DoormanDan]

Well, everybody has their own tastes. Thanks for giving it a try though :)

[armin]

Precisely dude ,you are welcome.

[Aries1984]

And I know what you mean about being busy and in school. I'm also a full-time student and the rest of the time I work. I hardly ever get the chance to write much myself her.

[DoormanDan]

Yeah, it's tedious, but thankfully I'm out of school for the summer, so I should be able to come on this site somewhat more(at least for a little while, that is)

[Aries1984]

I don't get summer break. I'll be finishing school just in time for Halloween though.

[Aries1984]

American Horror Story much there? I felt like I just saw an episode from this season's Freak Show and I still haven't even seen that episode. Heck, I need to finish season 2 first lol.

[DoormanDan]

Oh my God, that show looks so awesome, but I just keep forgetting to watch it. Thanks for the review :)

[Aries1984]

My favorite season from the show is season 1 (called Murder House). Once you start watching that, you're gonna have several moments where you'll find yourself saying, "Oh this family is serious f**ked up!" In one of the episodes of season 1 they used a very famous L.A. murder case which I thought was really cool.

[DoormanDan]

Wow, sounds like something I would really enjoy! I'm really looking forward to checking that series out now! :)

[AaronFreitas]

What an awesome write my friend! Reminds me kind of the American Horror Story Freakshow circus :) Loved it!

[Perkele.7885]

And this all happened under the Big Top and only the Ringmaster is the culprit for all this mayhem? Are there any credible witnesses who can assist the police in their investigation. I am thinking like the police investigator that I was.
The poem is over the top, over the Big Top> Now I know why the Circus does not interest me. I want to be able to leave when the show is over.
Dan, your imagination is Lloyds of London Material.

[DoormanDan]

yeah, I think most people would be turned off by a sign saying "Come into the Circus! One way trip!" I do not know who Lloyds of London is, but I'll check that out. Thanks for both the compliment, and the review :)

[WriterGirl101]

I really liked this... It sounded great. I loved it... :)

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for reviewing, I'm really glad you like this. :)

[EmaleighLynn]

This is very good, and really achieves the twisted theme you're going for. However, a couple lines seemed very familiar to me. Like, "Mayday! Mayday! The ship is slowly sinking!" and "Mama, we all go to hell!" Are you familiar with the songs "My Demons" by Starset and "Mama" by My Chemical Romance?

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for the review! I am familiar with those two songs, but neither of them were even partially in my head when I was writing this. There are many lines in many songs that are used by many different writers and singers. The line "Mayday, mayday, the ship is slowly sinking!" was originally just "Mayday, mayday, the ship is sinking!" but I had to change it to slowly sinking to keep the beat consistent, and other line was originally just the third line repeated, but I changed it to "Mama, we all go to hell at the last minute to go with the sudden psychopathic chaos taking place during the last part of the song. I know that these lines are used in those two songs, but neither of them were on my mind at the time of writing this. :)

[EmaleighLynn]

I see. Just something I noticed. I can't say I haven't done the same, because I'm sure I have! Besides, they're very good lines to use. :)

[costa siwale]

the song's like a devouring chant, dark disturbing words! i like it, my kind of poetry. awesome piece

[DoormanDan]

Dark poetry has always been my personal favorite type of poetry, but I don't write it all that often. I'm glad you like this, thanks for reviewing! :)

[costa siwale]

anytime Dan anytime

[That One Person]

This is amazing... Shivers went up my spine as I read it.
One-word summation of thoughts: wow. (and that's a good "wow, not a bad "wow")
It's beautiful.
Things like this make me wish there was a "like" button on this website.

[DoormanDan]

I'm really glad you like this, and am happy that it had that effect(since that was the effect I was really aiming for with this song). Thanks for reviewing :)