Reflections in the Water

About the people who've decided to abandon their fears

Reflections in the Water

I have spent so long hiding inside of the shadow of the sun

Because I was afraid to step out into this world of siren songs

But I have had enough of standing behind these closed curtains

One day the end may come upon us like an apparition

So as of today I shall erase this valley of paper  flowers

And replace it with never-ending plains of amaranth

I am done looking at the Earth through reflections in the water

Now I will kick down the door and step into the mist

I've been a part of the realm of colorless photos and dust-covered harps

For as long as I have been writing my sad story with the stars

But the words of my father I now remember

He told me that sunlight won't ever reach those living in the Nether

So as of today I shall erase this valley of paper  flowers

And replace it with never-ending plains of amaranth

I am done looking at the Earth through reflections in the water

Now I will kick down the door and step into the mist

We are all wavering candle lights shining briefly in the night

Until the day I melt away and become another faded ink page of time

I will hold my hands up high and live my life

Tonight I die so that I can finally be alive

As of today I shall erase this valley of paper  flowers

And replace it with never-ending plains of amaranth

I am done looking at the Earth through reflections in the water

Now I will kick down the door and step into the mist

Author's Note

I was inspired to write this one when I was outside my house at night, looked in the attic window, and saw a full moon in the reflection. Tell me what you think of it! :)

Reviews

[Nyu]

This has my favorite kind of poetry quality it reads like spoken word. Which has such an honest and beautiful flow. I liked it a lot thanks for submitting.

[DoormanDan]

Im glad you like this poem. Spoken word can be really awesome at times. Thanks for reviewing :)

[The StoryTeller]

Wow, this was epic and beautiful... full 100 for this. I love your creativity with colors and fonts and underlines... I love your imagery and the way your words flow together, sounding like modern poetry and Shakespearean era alike... I love how true the message in this is, and I love how beautifully it is said. Great write man, great write. I could almost see this put to music, or becoming famous.

[DoormanDan]

I highly doubt this will ever become famous. I really appreciate the kind words though. Thanks for reviewint this :)

[The StoryTeller]

Well, you never know! And no problem. :)

[Amber Lily]

I really like your story as to how this poem came to mind! It's so fascinating that a work of art is triggered in ones head just by one sight or thought. It made me feel like I can stretch my hands out to the impossible. Great work :)

[DoormanDan]

Inspiration never lets you know its coming, it kicks down your door and gives you a wedgie whenever it wants to lol. Im glad you liked the song :)

[Amber Lily]

lol If I was the type of girl to carry a purse, I'd carry a little note nap with me all the time so when inspiration slaps my face I could write then and there.

[Amber Lily]

*note pad... apparently I want to take a nap lol

[DoormanDan]

I hate it when Im in the middle of matth class and I get ideas for stuff. Im all like 2 plus 2 = Idontwannadothisjustletmewrite!!

[Jamestown]

Awesome piece of work, I had similar feelings of rebirth when I was saved, I truly enjoyed reading this and thanks for sharing.

[DoormanDan]

I really like to write things that people can relate to. Thank you very much for taking the time to review this poem :)

[Lizardo]

(Yesterday the star that with the full moon was Jupiter )
You left me without words...
This is yet my favorite poem from you now Dan :)
Such beautiful words and elengace too
Great job with this one!

[DoormanDan]

Thanks Lizardo. I really enjoyed writing this one way more than any other song I've ever written for some reason, and I'm glad you like it :)

[Lizardo]

I can see it, it has a perfect meaning :)

[Cool Girl]

Gosh..that was absolutely beautiful! I have no other words to describe it..

[DoormanDan]

I'm glad you think so CG. Thank you for both reviewing and for the kind words :)

[Cool Girl]

You're welcome:)

[Valentine]

This poem says a lot about the underneath you. In some ways it reminds me of myself when I was your age. Shy, afraid to step out of my comfort zone etc. You have expressed all of this so well. Kathie

[DoormanDan]

it's no fun to just stay in the shadows all of our lives, that was the message I really wanted to get across with this one. Thanks for the positive review :)

[Valentine]

You are very welcome. Kathie

[Stephen]

What I got out of it is a since of rebirth of oneself. The doing away of the waisting away of oneself, replacing it with the resolve to live life to the fullest, overcoming the petty things that bring us down. For life is to short and we need to make the most of it. Just what I got out of it, I don't know if that is what your message behind the poem was. Thanks for sharing!

[DoormanDan]

That is pretty much the meaning behind this poem. Thanks for reviewing :)