Ten Thousand Worlds

In loving memory of my birth Dad

Ten Thousand Worlds

 

The arctic wind is colder than ever before

Without your presence here to keep me warm

You and I are now separated by ten thousand worlds

That distance has ravaged my core with roaring sandstorms

Sadness wrapped her cloak around my heart

As they lowered you down into the dark

If only I could have seen you one last time

If only I had the chance to say goodbye

Though you’re now on the other side of the divide

You’ll always be right here by my side

 

There’s nothing I wouldn’t give to see your face again

But I know that you’ll be waiting for me at the end

Your memory I will never forget

I love You Dad.  Rest in Peace

Author's Note

My birth dad died a few years ago from Lung Cancer. I hadn't seen him in many years, and didn't get the chance to say goodbye. This is dedicated to him.

Reviews

[Robert]

This is a heart felt piece Dan and a nice tribute to your Dad. I lost my Dad to cancer when I was only 22. I too think about the times we could have had and its been 27 years. I needed him many times over the years but had to do it in my own. Well done here Dan as I connected to this piece.

[DoormanDan]

Thank you, and I'm very sorry to hear about your loss. Death is, without a doubt, one of the few things in this world that everybody can relate to.

[Girl With A Pen]

This poem really hit home for me. My dad also has cancer, I may not be a quote on quote "daddy's girl" like my family wants me to be, but it is still painful to know your loves ones life's hang in the balance. I'm sorry to hear about your father. This poem is a wonderful dedication to his memory.

[DoormanDan]

I'm really sorry to hear that your Dad has cancer. You are absolutely right, no matter how far apart we may drift from our relatives, it still hurts us in some way when we're faced with the possibility if having to say goodbye. I really do hope that things get better for him, don't give up hope!

[Tina Kline]

A very touching and loving tribute to your father.
it hurts terribly when someone we love is taken from us.

[DoormanDan]

Yes it does greatly. Thank you for reviewing this :)

[Tina Kline]

You are most welcome.

[Tasfia Islam]

Its breath taking... I can relate so much to it. And I obviously do understand the pain behind this poem cuz it deals with my life too.... My dad passed when I was just 10. Anyways, awesome write, ... :)

[DoormanDan]

Sorry for your loss. I'm glad you liked it, and thanks for reviewing it :)

[DoormanDan]

I'm sorry for your loss. Thanks for reviewing this :)

[Daydreamer]

IT'S BEAUTIFUL :')
MAY HE REST IN PEACE 🌹
AND MAY YOU GROW STRONGER
AND MAKE HIM PROUDER :')
Take care..
The '10000' idea was really great btw!

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for both the review and the kind words Manal, I appreciate it :)

[katja]

a truly poignant & heartfelt piece, Dan...
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"That distance has ravaged my core with roaring sandstorms"
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... your imagery in this lovely tribute is very evocative

thank you for sharing your pen
~yekaterina

[Workvio]

A beautiful memorial to your father, nicely penned ... I have lost my dad to, and that sense of loss does not go away any time soon, if ever ... Great poem ...

[DoormanDan]

Thank you for your kind words :)

[ms. barrie]

i'm truly sorry for your loss...i can relate somewhat...that said this is utterly beautiful, and extremely touching...i agree with Falling Leaf. -- this is indeed the perfect tribute to your Father.
~ i love every word you chose and and how you used them, in each line of every stanza ~
thank you for sharing :)

[DoormanDan]

I really appreciate your kind words. Thank you very much.

[ms. barrie]

you're very welcome, my pleasure :)

[Falling Leaf.]

I'm sorry for your loss, when tragedy strikes poets bleed onto paper, I admire your courage to share your sorrow with the rest of us. Love is easy to share with others, it feels great to shout it from the rooftops, but heartbreak unfortunately is much more difficult to expel.. Your piece was beautiful, I could feel your emotion even here, an unknown amount of miles away, and I like the soothing color and the emphasis that the change in size added... Normally I don't go for rhyming poetry but these aren't exact rhymes and they don't feel forced, so I quite enjoyed it... I'm sure your father would be proud, your writing is stunning, it was a perfect tribute to him, thank you for sharing~

[DoormanDan]

Thank you very much for your kind words :)

[Falling Leaf.]

No trouble at all. :)

[A Ghost of Myself]

This is touching piece, and great tribute to your father. I imagine each line was a pleasure and hard to write. Great memories mixed with great sadness. It's never easy to lose a love one. The one piece of solace we can take is we 'know' its not the last time we'll see them, and we'll never stop feeling their presence in every aspect of our lives.

[DoormanDan]

I really appreciate you taking the time to review my writing. Those words you say are the truest of true words indeed :)