Empty Mirrors

When we can't see our own reflections, we cannot tell what we have become

Empty Mirrors

Here I am again, underneath a crescent moon

My civil war has left me covered in wounds

From my self-doubt I cannot take refuge

Can somebody save me?  I know not what I should do!

Somebody help me

Bring this solar eclipse in my head to an end

So I can finally see what kind of man I am

A million miles of walking blind has me longing for light

I want to cast this failure away, into the fine cracks of time

Tell me, am I a man that I can truly defend?

Can you clear away the nebula that I am in?

Can somebody at last pull me out of this raging river

And return my reflection to these empty mirrors?

The starlight fades as shadows float over

It getting harder to see with every hour

Regret is a quicksand that's pulling me under

Will somebody save me from these meteor showers?

Somebody help me

Bring this solar eclipse in my head to an end

So I can finally see what kind of man I am

A million miles of walking blind has me longing for light

I want to cast this failure away, into the fine cracks of time

Tell me, am I a man that I can truly defend?

Can you clear away the nebula that I am in?

Can somebody at last pull me out of this raging river

And return my reflection to these empty mirrors?

Shine a radiant light across the barren mountain ranges of my mind

So that I can see the distant dreams for which I have strived

Somebody help me

Bring this solar eclipse in my head to an end

So I can finally see what kind of man I am

A million miles of walking blind has me longing for light

I want to cast this failure away, into the fine cracks of time

Tell me, am I a man that I can truly defend?

Can you clear away the nebula that I am in?

Can somebody at last pull me out of this raging river

And return my reflection to these empty mirrors?

Author's Note

Please tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Valentine]

A very deep and pretty well thought out write. Valentine

[Skai Rain]

I love the set-up of this poem, the whole thing is just so different. Great work! :)

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for reading this Brit. I really try my best to make my writing unique. :)

[A Scribbler Named Bek]

Wow I like the outer space theme in here; its perfect for such an otherworldly poem. This is gorgeous :)

[Cool Girl]

This is wonderful an very creative! Great job:)

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for reading this CG! :)

[Cool Girl]

You are very welcome! I added on our role play group!

[wordman]

well you are certainly creative

[DoormanDan]

I really appreciate the review!

[wordman]

actually i was on your page earlier and the phone rang so i left for a few minutes
i was on live feed and was commenting

[DoormanDan]

Ah, well thanks for the compliment! :)

[Amber Lily]

This is great! I love how the text is written out to put emphasis on certain words or phrases. It is true that you can see a change within yourself in a mirror, a almost scary thought. But not being able to see it... now that's dangerous. It made me realize that you can look at your reflection, but unless you study it you will never know what other people see, just what you see. Everyone wears a mask, sometimes for others, sometimes for themselves.
A great well thought out write :)

[DoormanDan]

Thank you so much for takint the time to review my work!

[Amber Lily]

Your most welcome!

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Powerful, creative and well written. I like the way you did it...:)............

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for taking the time to read and review this! I sincerely appreciate the positive feedback! :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)..........

[Dhaye]

Wow! This is so creative. Often that we cannot really see our true refection on our mirror.
Great concept and exceptional presentation!

[DoormanDan]

I really appreciate the positive feedback! Thanks! :)

[Lizardo]

This is Awesome, Brilliant, Beautiful
Wow, I think this one is my favorite one from you
Keep writing ! you're good writer!

[DoormanDan]

Thank you! This is one of my personal favorites as well :)

[Black Cat Fever]

This is a truly brilliant write. You're creative talent shines. We all go through thee inner battles, many win and some don't make it. Yes, many can relate to what you say here. And I love the unique way you've expressed this. Impressive and I'll say it again, amazing talent with the words!!!

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for such kind words! It always fun to write stuff that lets people know they are not alone!

[Black Cat Fever]

You are most welcome.