tonight

tonight

A Poem by daniel lee johnson

a single bird serenades the old man
its evening note ending
with the beginning of the twilight
crickets begin their chorus
their sounds of love echoes
the sun's fading beauty
thru pine tree branches
limbs outstretched
waiting to hold the night
the stars the universe
and to once again
to cover the old man
in its dark beautiful embrace



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© 2015 daniel lee johnson


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Very full of wonderful imagery!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

daniel lee johnson

9 Years Ago

Thank you Gia and I love your name !!!!
An enchanting piece of poetry ..a serenaded song of nature's beauty covering the old man.. nice work..

Posted 9 Years Ago


daniel lee johnson

9 Years Ago

Thank you Fran. It's just a little taste of my life these days.
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ron
Very thought provoking and poetic. Nicely written.

Posted 9 Years Ago


daniel lee johnson

9 Years Ago

Thanks Ron !!!
ron

9 Years Ago

Your welcome Daniel.
Dear Daniel

A friend drew me to your writing because he felt you had merit.

I can see what he means.

I usually review long. But I am going to change pattern here and review some of your pieces rather than just one more briefly but still according to my style.

This:

14 lines of verse with no rhyme or rhythm.

But listen ever so quietly to the melody and the song.

The central character? The old man.

And what happens to the old man?

Magic!

Bear in mind here I am completely overturning the way I often review.

I have no complaint.

You language is metaphorical and lyrical.

I need not quote, It pervades the piece.

All I need to know is to add the1st and last lyrical lines together and I get to the point:

'a single bird serenades the old man'
'in its dark beautiful embrace'

Usually by now I would have given you 200 words on this piece.

But in using the word piece here I find peace.


James

Posted 9 Years Ago


daniel lee johnson

9 Years Ago

Yes James I have read and reread this and I had to let it stand as is. But I know what you are talki.. read more
James Hanna-Magill

9 Years Ago

Dear Daniel I am all about support and I think you write well. James
daniel lee johnson

9 Years Ago

I agree and I am glad to be part of writers cafe. My poems are scattered from here to hell and perha.. read more
simple and beautiful message shared

Posted 9 Years Ago


daniel lee johnson

9 Years Ago

Thank you Jeanne Marie !!
Great piece, beautiful calming imagery and a solid message!
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

Posted 9 Years Ago


daniel lee johnson

9 Years Ago

Yes Jamestown I live in the country and it is very calming and peaceful. I try to capture those elus.. read more

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Added on April 3, 2015
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