Fur

Whatever it was did it choose to stay?

It was during the night at around 8 pm,I was going upstairs to the 1st floor where my room is.The stairs leading to the first floor were well lit by the bulb but the ones going to the terrace(2nd floor) were dark. I was climbing the stairs and I had just climbed a few steps when I see two small dots of red color coming from the top of the stairs which finished on the 2nd floor.At first I thought I was just imagining them and I turned my head down.Then after a couple of steps more I looked up once again and saw those same red dots only this time they appeared to glow brighter and seemed like someones eyes staring me.I thought my brother was playing a prank on me so I shouted his name telling him to stop.I got no response,I climbed futher upstairs to get closer to him.As I moved further up I started to see a figure around those eyes,it appeared to have black fur and then suddenly my eyes caught a glimpse of its blue hands with pointed nails and I screamed for my life and went running downstairs alerting everyone in the house.I started to cry and tell my mother what I saw.She consoled me and scolded me for watching horror movies and supernatural tv shows at night.She thought it was an allusion and told me to get my mind of it.This time after eating my dinner I went to my room very quickly without even looking upwards once while climbing the stairs.I locked my door and lay on my bed.I thought maybe mom was right,I decided to get my mind off the incident,so I switched on the T.V and started watching comedy show.After an hour I felt sleepy and had almost forgotten about the incident.I switched off the T.V....my eyes got transfixed on the blank tv screen,I couldnt move my body and my heart started to pump out of my chest.Those red dots were on the screen too only this time I could feel somebodys hand on my shoulder.

Reviews

[Justin Robben]

See I like your concepts (this is the second one I felt "frustrated" with)...
I personally feel you need to expand upon this. Not as much as Vicariously, but still...

Your pieces moves swiftly, too swiftly, from one event to the next. As if directions in a rule book. Describe the area a tad, bring the stairs to life, bring his room to life. Creepify things, hehe.

I would also recommend breaking your pieces up, format-wide. The small block of text doesn't allow room for the suspense.
Add in the dialogue. You can show with words a lot of things.

Another good potential piece, man.