Blue to Red

Twisted, distorted dizziness

A path down to destruction

The pain burns electrically

As you trace the corruption

The moments you spend in awe

Following that blue wonder

From path to path

Vein to vein

There is no way

To escape the blame

Try to run

From all the pain 

As you cut that blue wonder

That now becomes

Red as sunset

Reviews

[Philip Smith]

Sounds like your cutting your wrist? In saying that I mean to say it was very descriptive. I liked it and will look forward to reading more.

[Kaylor Mason]

The lure of the razor is all too morbid and real! It's difficult, hard to understand, and yet there it is; you can never simply laugh it away or forget about it or trust it to heal itself. People try to forget their misery and emotional pain by hiding and seeking shelter in physical pain, or by finding release and forgetfulness in it--hence the razor and cutting (or in more extreme cases, suicide by slit wrists.) I love the way this poem describes it without being too gross or sickening on the stomach--it addresses the problem, let's people who don't suffer from cutting know about it, and yet it doesn't put people off their lunch and make them go read something else. That takes a good degree of skill in itself for any writer, even Edgar Allen Poe. I think Poe would've liked this one a lot; and I don't mean that in a negative way. Nicely penned :)

[The Analog Kid]

This is a sparse description of an ugly reality. Understood why it happens, but some very nice writing:)

[R J Askew]

Forgot to say it was the title that pulled me in. Having read the poem I now think the title is really strong.

[R J Askew]

Life is sometimes strange in the way it drives us to do these things to ourselves. It is as if we must see it, show it to itself alomst, be close to its transitory flow, to know it the more. Perhaps we want to scream at it for how it makes us feel. And then there is curiosity, too, I suppose. Ach, it is a hard thing to contemplate. But I think the key word is 'pain'. The pain must be strong to drive anyone to seek this sort of release. But pain is part of life, so i suppose it is really not too surprising. I can't say I enjoyed the reading of this, but it is definitely well written. You capture the moment really well and the poem is well executed. Not one spare word!