Left to Die

uhm yeah.... first poem ive tried to write... keep in mind im not really all that good at poety sooo at least I tried. Thanks for any comments or reviews... no hate PLEASE.

Dead, broken, silent and rejected

Dreams and reality left to be reconnected.

To my broken heart and mind

If only the fragile time could rewind.

I could be free of the despair

Maybe I would be aware

Of the burning desires.

 

Left on the beach withering

The long tail of life slithering

Me by.

I know today is the day I will die

After much suffering.

 

Surely someone will come and alleviate

The pain and stress that I don’t appreciate.

Sleeping now, I must warn

That my life is torn

Apart by the monsters inside

To which I must abide.

Death is near.

 

Shadowy figure on the beach,

my heart races I am besieged

the knife of death comes crashing down.

I have been left to drown

By the cruelty of life itself.

Author's Note

first attempt ever...

Reviews

[Jordan's Back]

This is a Wonderful piece and you have a natural ability with the written verse. Your Style is original and unique and your rhythm and flow are astounding for a first timer. I love the Dark Picture of heartbreak you painted here and the never ending struggle to the futility of life. I have always said their is no such thing as a bad poem, but yours is way better than I had expected for your first. :) I love this piece sincerely and i thank you for allowing me the honor and pride of letting me read this masterpiece of soul.

[kally]

awww thank youuu :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

I like this(: you did a really good job of expressing your emotions in this, and it flows well. Great write!

[kally]

OHH THANK YOUU

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

You're welcome (: