Your Train is Delayed For (add time here)...We are Very sorry for this delay...

Don't you love those robotic voices that have no emotion and aren't really sorry? The modern world amuses me, this is just from being sat at a station and watching, people, watching.

A subtle escape
....*whispers* anoymous is sometimes good

A face in the crowd

The glancing looks
Brick and mortar
A certain trigger
The rubbish collector

A small distance from home

A
Brief
Walk
Back

Trial and error
You could see up her skirt from the way she sat (perv) (accidental)
Adjusts her jeans

Chavs shouting at eachother
Spit! On the pavement - such class -
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Reviews

[Nicholas Hallows]

Sounds like my observations at the bus stop! An enjoyable piece of seemingly random observation. NH

[Ilene M.W. Lush]

thoroughly enjoyable piece.

in and out and peeking up and under and around...

i like this sort of play that makes you take it in all at once like a painting.

nice
thanks
ilene

[Danielle]

This is great Dan. I like the way that the layout gives hints to the reader as to the pace that the piece should be read.

[Amanda Crandall]

very cute poem. I enjoy the wording. Particularly the way you fashioned people glancing over the trash collector. anonymous is sometimes good - and other times it is GREAT.

[vydenmyria]

a lil off the wall, yet enjoyable

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[Tiffany Pochatko]

I have to admit I didn't know what to expect from the title lol. Also your description of this peice, which is priceless, threw me off a little too. Ha. This was good. The structure can't be found in any literature book, that I know of, and it's unique. Your own style.
"Trial and error
You could see up her skirt from the way she sat (perv) (accidental)
Adjusts her jeans"
Hahaha. I look forward to reading more of your work soon.

[the eyeball kid]

i like the way this poem is written. Very unique...great job.