For The Warmth To Come

The skies are blue...and it's nearly 9PM...how the early thoughts of summer lighten life :)

From the lives we sit within

Others stand beside blind

And under a yellow light

Couples glow in delight

As a lonesome soul

Scatters by

A dirty alley sells to satisfy

 

The modern blood

Is a selfish one

A twist of lemon in the eye of some

And as I watch the closest heart

I thank that life

Has given me a part of the puzzle

That troubles us all

 

From the first step to the final call

 

So I gather my pieces in the mellow light

The expectant summer is in my sight

This journey feels like it has just begun

And I doze back on the recliner of the morning May sun

 

Reviews

[Travis Lawrence]

The first stanza reminds me of Eliot, how it has a solemn rythm, as well as contrast, ala "couples glow in delight / as a lonesome soul / scatters by / a dirty alley sells to satisfy". The ending is so relaxing as well. I'm not sure what part of the puzzle life has given you, but I assume that is supposed to be ambiguous. Very nice write, sorry that I'm just now getting around to reading it.

-Travis

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

'A twist of lemon in the eye of some' - really catches me with awe. Nicely written - beautiful cadence and a sense of self-worth and self-satisfaction make this a terrific poem. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[Flow]

Spring brings in new life and new beginnings, enjoy the sun and the new things life will bring. I enjoyed your words today~

[Wildfleour]

Dan, I like the rhythm and mood you set with this piece.

[Damian Alan Gray]

Excellent, my friend! A beautiful ode to the upcoming warmth. This piece was as easily read as it was spoken, and it has masterwork written all over it. Bravo!

[Gravedigger]

Indeed, indeed, indeed summer has begun! I loved how you described peoples vision as "with a twist of lemon" which is normally a good thing, but using it to describe how critical people are. And others may be sitting beside us blind, but maybe if we try just by being ourselves we can open their eyes to the world around them. As we say in Ireland, "up the sunbeams!" (here's to good times...) Nicely done.

[Annalisa]

This was lovely. I loved the way it flowed from subject to subject, never dwelling. Catching snapshots of life. This was amazing. The flow was smooth and even though their isn't a rhyme scheme (or at least not one that I could see) it has a rhythm that was beautiful and flowed off the tung. I especially loved the lines "As a lonesome soul/ Scatters by/ A dirty alley sells to satisfy".....this was lovely. It made me think of existentialism, especially when you talked about figuring out the puzzle that bothers man kind... Kudos.

[Treasaigh (The Solitar..]

Wow amazing write...very thought provoking and moving. Beautiful words=) I'm adding this to my favorites=)