For The Warmth To Come

The skies are blue...and it's nearly 9PM...how the early thoughts of summer lighten life :)

From the lives we sit within

Others stand beside blind

And under a yellow light

Couples glow in delight

As a lonesome soul

Scatters by

A dirty alley sells to satisfy

 

The modern blood

Is a selfish one

A twist of lemon in the eye of some

And as I watch the closest heart

I thank that life

Has given me a part of the puzzle

That troubles us all

 

From the first step to the final call

 

So I gather my pieces in the mellow light

The expectant summer is in my sight

This journey feels like it has just begun

And I doze back on the recliner of the morning May sun

 

Reviews

[Travis Lawrence]

The first stanza reminds me of Eliot, how it has a solemn rythm, as well as contrast, ala "couples glow in delight / as a lonesome soul / scatters by / a dirty alley sells to satisfy". The ending is so relaxing as well. I'm not sure what part of the puzzle life has given you, but I assume that is supposed to be ambiguous. Very nice write, sorry that I'm just now getting around to reading it.

-Travis

[foolsrush]

I really enjoyed this one

[Marina]

This was amazing. I love the way it flows.
I absolutley love it.

Great job.
Your an awsome writer!

XxStaySweet,
Rinaaaaaa

[The Lady Anasteja]

Wonderful! Shows how rotten and lovely the world can be.

[The Spaniard]

"From the first step to the final call"

Really dig this line, and the entire piece for that matter. Gives off a feeling of serenity which is nice to read about sometimes. I get so lost in my dark little world, it's good to see some sun.

[Barbara Walker]

I love the imagery in this poem. My favorite, "The modern blood is a selfish one, a twist of lemon in the eye of some". It's amazing what comes to mind when you're just kicking back, letting the mind go.Thanks for sharing! Barbara

[HoorayForUnderdog]

You know...I can imagine this poem as song lyrics...as I was reading it I could almost hear the melody.

[D. Elizabeth]

Dan this is absolutley beautiful!. This gripped me from the first letter the the last. I wanted to read more, and was sad when it ended. It was short but not too short, just perfect. Vying for a piece of what you posses. Your vocabulary I must confess, a dictionary I want to put to the test. Little rhyme for you. xo- D.E.

sorry I didn't get to the request until now.

[Winter McPherson]

This is a lovely poem. The mixture of a couple glowing in delight while some lonesome soul is in the alley really captured my imagination. And then there you are in the sun. We creatures who share this planet are an odd mix of sorrow and joy, light and darness.

[Nicholas Hallows]

Very well done Dan!
It is amazing how the onset of summer lightens our thoughts.
This has a fitting peaceful rhythm and the whole things works well.
NH