Four Glass Planet Guide

Just a glance out my window, the smudges led to a thought pattern, I think it's reasonably light as well and I like that :)

Handprints on windows

From pushing cardboard CD cases in the gaps

To soften the rattling

Of storm clad vibrations

 

Broken tile leaking

Facing all the wrath of seasons

It doesn’t know about

But steady firm, it holds

 

Aerials seeking out a reaction

Wave filled they become

Standing proud with a stiff back

Overlooking their conquest

 

Cracked plate on blue carpet

Fallen bottle took its life

Wrapped steady in paper towel

No use now, so thrown to death

 

Chipped cup looks on with a rye smile

Of glee in its shine

For it’s still considered useful

And warmth seeps from its edge

 

Reviews

[BrightEyes]

oh that naughty little cup! taking pleasure from the misery of other household items! lol. I liked this alot - of course, I do believe that all the inanimate objects in my home wander about - which is why I can never find anything when I need it, despite the fact that I saw it only 5 mins. ago. What can I say? they like to watch me go nuts hahahaha.

laura

[Frances O'Neill]

I did not really understand the title, but I did like the poem. I was trying to imagine where the tile

was in the second stanza, but anyway, thank you for sharing your poem!

[Marina]

"Chipped cup looks on with a rye smile

Of glee in its shine

For it's still considered useful

And warmth seeps from its edge"

I love that line. I absolutly adore this poem.
Great Job!

Sweet write,
Rina

[Rachel DeHart]

I really enjoyed this one..
"Aerials seeking out a reaction"
And that line is amazing.

Great job!

[Aamna!]

wow that is a really creative poem!

[Jacquelene Vanessa More..]

Chipped cup looks on with a rye smile

Of glee in its shine

For it's still considered useful

And warmth seeps from its edge



this is so cute. it reminds me of the brave little toaster. that cup is a lil trouble maker! this reminds me of my childhood. when i would runaway from my room and peak it to see if my toys were dancing about. i'm adding this to my faveorites!

[Michael X]

dan like this, i had to laugh because this poem takes the reader for a real loop, is ingeniously
creative and draws to be read over and for for sake of understanding, i enjoyed the way you opened
this poem with realistic scenery, capturing the woes suffering from the effects of a broken window,
feels like one is sitting and looking around, at the environment, the livingroom, you have the tv,
the cup on the floor, sometimes life feels like another planet, and youve captured such in these words

[Jane Doe]

I love the vividness of your descriptions, I can so clearly picture it all in my head. Wonderful piece, it has good flow too.

[Natalie C]

Hey this was very clever Dan. Who would have thought that everyday objects would make fir such an interesting and enjoyable piece.
I just loved how you personified each object, giving them a life like quality to them, really did work so well

Great piece, thanks a million for sharing it with me

[D. Elizabeth]

Is this about an earthquake or something more intreguing? Think i spelled that word wrong. oops. xo -D.E.

[CLUTZ]

This is so different. I like it. This may sound a little weird but the poems so colorful.