The raw emotion and imagery portrayed in this well written piece is truly impressive. The line "I am not beautiful, but I am real" sums up the premise of this poem. Staying genuine and true to one's self is the true beauty in individuality and when we tend to give too much, we lose a piece of ourselves that is not so easy to get back. Stay honest because you my friend are simply amazing!!!
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
thank you so much :) your kind words mean a lot to me!
the admission at the end of human inperfection as an entity or concept based on a more fundamental
one, ( that beauty is the thing your looking at) is sensational. "Petaled bones" is a line I might just
steal from you....lol,
good work,
dana
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
good writers borrow, great writers steal! thank you so much for your kind words :)
Happiness is a state of being that is often misunderstood by the outsider. I think that is where the phrase "happy as a pig in s**t" comes from. Not to equate your own description as such, but to make the point that sometimes even if we don't look fine, we may indeed be perfectly fine with our present states. This is another thought provoking read, built upon voice and artistic descriptions Dana.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
i really like your take on this one- i'm as lost and clueless as i've ever been and more okay with t.. read morei really like your take on this one- i'm as lost and clueless as i've ever been and more okay with that than i've ever been! thanks so much for reading and for your kind words.
11 Years Ago
You're welcome Dana, and beautiful don't kid yourself.
A haunting sentiment... The desire to "give" of oneself, but knowing that there is little to give...we sell ourselves short this way all too often; we are all damaged souls, but for each one of us there is a mirror, another half. I also enjoy the idea of asking someone not to try to "fix" you, because again, this seems to be something that happens so often; we are what we are...scars and all. This was very powerful in its simplicity and honesty. You have a beautiful heart, my friend.
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11 Years Ago
thank you so much, i always look forward to hearing your thoughts and sentiments :) you have a beaut.. read morethank you so much, i always look forward to hearing your thoughts and sentiments :) you have a beautiful heart (and mind) as well
The raw emotion and imagery portrayed in this well written piece is truly impressive. The line "I am not beautiful, but I am real" sums up the premise of this poem. Staying genuine and true to one's self is the true beauty in individuality and when we tend to give too much, we lose a piece of ourselves that is not so easy to get back. Stay honest because you my friend are simply amazing!!!
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
thank you so much :) your kind words mean a lot to me!
The raw emotion on this piece :( Brilliant read Dana. ''i am not beautiful, but i am real.'' staying genuine helps even the strangers define you just all, this is well penned. Amazing
Sean
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
thank you so much for stopping by and giving me a read! your kind words mean a lot.
"my brain hums with scraps of poetry and madness."
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