never date a poet

i should take my own advice

in your poetry you wash beauty

over curvaceous female bodies, 

and guild their public transport depression

with romantical addictions, 

hot messy hair and over sized clothing. 

you light their pain ridden eyes

with moonlight and trick their loneliness

into an impetuous love story. 

yet here i am right next to you, 

sitting beneath the weight of your arm around me:

you trace your nails across my back

and i feel it burn instead of caress 

you kiss me and bite my lip

to draw blood instead of seduce

you hold me tightly around the ribs

to break instead of protect

you look at me with sad eyes

your poetic mind swirling and concaving

behind your teeth, 

and i feel like the already dead and bloody

carcass of roadkill being further torn apart

and deformed by austere rubber tires against gravel. 

i wish you loved me like the characters

that flow from the tip of your pen. 

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I wish that I could take your advice as well... It seems a beautiful thing, to be with someone who has such a creative and beautiful poetic mind, but sometimes we find that there are more demons than light, and that the "subjects" of his/her poetry are actually more important than we are. Again, i have written about this..."A Poet's Farewell" is one that I wrote recently about one of my poetic dating transgressions...lol Perhaps you would appreciate it.

I wish you loved me like the characters
that flow from the tip of your pen. -- Truly feel you here...completely and fully.

This is a fabulous write...I'm very impressed.

[Dana Alsamsam]

wow thank you so much! i'm truly flattered that a writer as great as yourself enjoys my writing. i definitely plan to stop by and reciprocate in terms of reviews :) here's to hoping that we find someone who holds us more importantly than characters...

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Anytime...I truly enjoy your style. It reminds me a lot of my own in terms of content, concept, etc. I'm humbled you think me great...thank you.

[Astro]

Uh, I can't condone the message of this poems title as I am a poet, lol. The body of this piece, pun intended, is gorgeous in its description, the voice tender and seemingly insecure, but more rightly astute and possibly perceptive. What's roadkill to some is a fine meal to another, as twisted and deluded as that might sound. Be the beauty that inspires the poets mind and heart, not just physically but emotionally and artistically. Perhaps, it isn't you that isn't measuring up, but he/she who isn't a strong enough poet to capture you completely.

[Dana Alsamsam]

hahaha i know! if people were to actually follow this message i would be single for the rest of my life as i will never not be a poet (hopefully). i can only hope that's the case, but with his poetic abilities it is hard to believe sometimes...thank you for your very kind words :)

[Astro]

You are welcome, fellow poetess I wish you well.

[Archangel Gabriel]

My 'God' Dana this poem his so powerful and full of pathos. It has deep hurt and regret and yet such longing intertwined. My advice choose your poet carefully!

[Dana Alsamsam]

great advice! because if i did advise people not to date poets i would be ultimately secluding myself to a life alone because i will never not be a poet! thank you so much :)

[Archangel Gabriel]

From one angel to another

[kublakhan27]

It is unsettling how much this poem puts me in mind of myself...even though I write a lot of personal stuff, there is no question that my poet's persona is light years away from my true self, and even though I can't say I've been in this predicament, the mere possibility of it scares me a bit...of course, these are all compliments in light of how much I was able to tap into this piece and hear it speak to me on a deep personal level...that's the essence of poetry, and the essence of poetry is on full display here :)

[Dana Alsamsam]

i hope that when you are in a serious relationship you are able to treat your significant other sacredly and value the connection as a person. the greatest advisory i can give you is to keep them real. people are not characters and don't want to be. thank you so much for reading and reviewing. as always your words mean a lot, and i'm really glad you were able to tap into this on a personal level!

[kublakhan27]

Romantic poetry is essentially about ideals...I think I would be okay with not letting that seep into my real-life relations but your advice is something I'm always sure to never lose sight of :)

[Charlie]

This is incredible, but kind of painful as I felt like I was viewing it from the other side. Your word choice is potent, thanks for the beautiful write.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you so much for stopping by and giving me a read!

[K. Louis]

for some reason it won't allow me to include the rest of my review...so i'll add onto it here:

Just one small suggestion that you can either take or omit on your own intuition. I don't think the last line, "you don't make me feel beautiful" is necessary. I feel like those feelings are already strongly implied that that particular line, doesn't add anything. However, the line before it.."I wish you loved me....tip of your pen" I think is a great place to conclude. I'm really enjoying your work Dana. Keep it up!!

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you so much! i actually took out and added back in that last line multiple times so thank you for the suggestion- it almost wraps a bow around the present that doesn't need to be there to make it a complete work. i'll read it tomorrow with a fresh outlook and decide whether to keep it or not. thanks again for your in depth review :)

[K. Louis]

You're welcome! :)

[K. Louis]

I really loved reading this. I felt the pain and loneliness she probably quietly suffered inside, holding out hope that maybe one day he would start to love her the way he did his work. For me, the last three stanzas really stood out in this piece. The imagery was outstanding..."I feel like the already dead and bloody carcass of roadkill being further torn apart and deformed by austere rubber tires against gravel." WOW!!

[B-poet]

Looks like he loves his craft a little more than his significant other. That's a usual fork in the road for most people who are more passionate about their careers rather than their so-called intimate relationships. Great work here. I liked the overall message you've conveyed here. :)

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you so much! i just wish the significant other that was being neglected wasn't me haha. thanks again for always reading and offering your kind words! i haven't forgotten about your RRs and promise i will be doing some reading/reviewing very soon :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Dana this is amazing...so different with the phrases you use...

i can't pick out favorite lines, they are all wonderful

and how sad...can a poet be that ruthless in real life and that tender and loving in their poetry?

ah yes,...take arthur Rimbau---nasty individual...beautiful poetry...

i love this poem...one of my favorites i have read here.

jacob

[Dana Alsamsam]

wow thank you so much! this really means a lot especially coming from a poet that i definitely look up to :) thanks again for reading and for always offering your kind words to me.

[The Verse: A Poetry Jou..]

WOW, we would love submission including works as well written and talented as this. excellent read! Thank you.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thanks so much for your consideration! i'll definitely look into it and possibly send in some work :)