never date a poet

i should take my own advice

in your poetry you wash beauty

over curvaceous female bodies, 

and guild their public transport depression

with romantical addictions, 

hot messy hair and over sized clothing. 

you light their pain ridden eyes

with moonlight and trick their loneliness

into an impetuous love story. 

yet here i am right next to you, 

sitting beneath the weight of your arm around me:

you trace your nails across my back

and i feel it burn instead of caress 

you kiss me and bite my lip

to draw blood instead of seduce

you hold me tightly around the ribs

to break instead of protect

you look at me with sad eyes

your poetic mind swirling and concaving

behind your teeth, 

and i feel like the already dead and bloody

carcass of roadkill being further torn apart

and deformed by austere rubber tires against gravel. 

i wish you loved me like the characters

that flow from the tip of your pen. 

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I wish that I could take your advice as well... It seems a beautiful thing, to be with someone who has such a creative and beautiful poetic mind, but sometimes we find that there are more demons than light, and that the "subjects" of his/her poetry are actually more important than we are. Again, i have written about this..."A Poet's Farewell" is one that I wrote recently about one of my poetic dating transgressions...lol Perhaps you would appreciate it.

I wish you loved me like the characters
that flow from the tip of your pen. -- Truly feel you here...completely and fully.

This is a fabulous write...I'm very impressed.

[Dana Alsamsam]

wow thank you so much! i'm truly flattered that a writer as great as yourself enjoys my writing. i definitely plan to stop by and reciprocate in terms of reviews :) here's to hoping that we find someone who holds us more importantly than characters...

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Anytime...I truly enjoy your style. It reminds me a lot of my own in terms of content, concept, etc. I'm humbled you think me great...thank you.

[Pete Langley]

There are poets and poets, Eglantine....poets that write for the heart and those that write from the heart....as a sometime performance poet over the years, I`ve met a few of the latter sort ...they have all the words and none of the heart, though you`d never know! Some of them are brilliant, and will be remembered into posterity as soulful bards, but have the biggest egos and most disasterous relationships. P.

[eglantine]

Yes, I have vowed to never date a poet myself. I feel like there'd be too much competition and bitterness.

Suggestion: "you trace your nails across my back / --it burns"

Thank you for sharing.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thanks so much for your suggestion :)

[Richard]

See ... this is very focused very clear eyed and very passionate and very good and very right ... why can I not do this? I can't write for s**t :(
this is fantastic again
very confident yet very ambivalent

[Dana Alsamsam]

oh my goodness never say that you can't write! everyone has their own forms of expression. thank you so much!

[Richard]

well I know I can write I know I'm good, but in terms of writing straight in a line or in any kind of polished or focused way I can;t ... so I respect anyone who can and do it well and you can :)

I'm not feeling badly for myself,

but yeah you're welcome

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Very good, In the poem the character describes of is aware of the other person being a player and how besides being aware of I told you so, the character falls for the illusion the player has spelled on the character of the poem.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you for your kind words and interpretation!

[Johanna]

"i wish you loved me like the characters
that flow from the tip of your pen. "

Most amazing lines! great job!!

[Dana Alsamsam]

thanks so much for stopping by and giving me a read :)

[Johanna]

No problem :)

[IWRITE]

the last two lines carry so much weight its ridiculous.

this is good poetry. poetry that doesn't bore the reader. much needed. thank you.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thanks so much for stopping by and giving me a read :)

[IWRITE]

hey, thank you for writing well. i wouldn't read it if it weren't for you-

[Horizon K.]

Wow this was just so incredible! The image of a poet creating and destroying everything in sight just to rebirth everything in a more romantically tragic illusion... You kiss me and bite my lip, to draw blood instead of seduce...The poet draws truths but the poet can also find a muse this way too... The irony of this poet... Love this!

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you so much for stopping by and giving me a read! i really like your interpretation :)

[DCT ponderings]

Powerful juxtaposition in your imagery. Reality versus illusions. It was haunting, as if his capacity to create such lovely pictures of others should translate to this relationship. But how often we neglect those we should be the closest too. Dana excellent poem.

My two favorite sections:
yet here i am right next to you,
sitting beneath the weight of your arm around me:

i wish you loved me like the characters
that flow from the tip of your pen.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you so much for reading and your kind review!

[Corset]

we should all take our own advice but we rarely do. This write is 99% of the problem with the difference between reality and fiction, you have expressed it perfectly and with such finesse.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you so much for stopping by and giving me a read and also for your very kind review :)

[Corset]

your welcome :)

[Lucien Maier]

very nice! I love the last line. I can feel the pain in the piece it comes through very easily good work

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you for stopping by and giving me a read :)

[Lucien Maier]

anytime, thanks for having me