never date a poet

i should take my own advice

in your poetry you wash beauty

over curvaceous female bodies, 

and guild their public transport depression

with romantical addictions, 

hot messy hair and over sized clothing. 

you light their pain ridden eyes

with moonlight and trick their loneliness

into an impetuous love story. 

yet here i am right next to you, 

sitting beneath the weight of your arm around me:

you trace your nails across my back

and i feel it burn instead of caress 

you kiss me and bite my lip

to draw blood instead of seduce

you hold me tightly around the ribs

to break instead of protect

you look at me with sad eyes

your poetic mind swirling and concaving

behind your teeth, 

and i feel like the already dead and bloody

carcass of roadkill being further torn apart

and deformed by austere rubber tires against gravel. 

i wish you loved me like the characters

that flow from the tip of your pen. 

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I wish that I could take your advice as well... It seems a beautiful thing, to be with someone who has such a creative and beautiful poetic mind, but sometimes we find that there are more demons than light, and that the "subjects" of his/her poetry are actually more important than we are. Again, i have written about this..."A Poet's Farewell" is one that I wrote recently about one of my poetic dating transgressions...lol Perhaps you would appreciate it.

I wish you loved me like the characters
that flow from the tip of your pen. -- Truly feel you here...completely and fully.

This is a fabulous write...I'm very impressed.

[Dana Alsamsam]

wow thank you so much! i'm truly flattered that a writer as great as yourself enjoys my writing. i definitely plan to stop by and reciprocate in terms of reviews :) here's to hoping that we find someone who holds us more importantly than characters...

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Anytime...I truly enjoy your style. It reminds me a lot of my own in terms of content, concept, etc. I'm humbled you think me great...thank you.

[Vegetarian Wolf]

wow when I thought feminism couldn't reach a more outrageous ideal, I find this. Jeez.
Its here stating that its a bad thing to be creative and expressing oneself. Sure everyone is selfish.
but having something of a sense of romanticism doesn't make a person a ego maniac, or a vampire.
Issues. everyone has them. Perfect world. why do we have hospitals. or graveyards. Um.
Nice name for a poem or a creative endeavor. Ironic. But very good poem. I like it a lot even though
its a slap in the face catch all phrase. If your referring to Jim Morrison Ok. Might as well say there shouldn't be any writers that make any romantic stories that are men. Anyways the fight between cats and dogs, venus and mars continues. Great poem but amazingly misguiding. Never date a poet. well I guess no one should find beauty in anything unless its by someones approval. A wonan's scorn..

Anyways really like your style but this is insulting to any one who feels anything and wants to put it down in some kind of format. Makes it seem like having a creative aspiration is just a self serving tool for ego driven narcissists. peoples beauty or their ability to express it has never gotten in the way of them being a bad person. This almost makes anyone who has an artistic side sound like they have a mental illness by default or its just a characteristic of them being a very flawed person. If directed towards men. Amazing. I suppose the men who atleast attempt to be original in someway are the greatest tyrants and the most destructive, and sociopathic? You have a lot of talent. But people creating their own beautiful expressions does not imply that they're responsible, for someone else's pain in their life. Unless what they are doing is and its intentions are destructive and transgressive. Someone once said art is lies to express truth. What they are capable of in real life is another story has nothing to do with being artistic. Woman's Scorn. Great talent in this writing but selfish. I suppose the person your speaking about
was very selfish.

[Vidya Bacchus]

People are very hard understand.You wonder how someone who write about being gentle and sweet can actually want to be unkind and hurtful in reality.Well penned :)

[Kelly Scheppers]

My first reading of you, Dana. Your expressions rattle my consciousness, wanting to read more.

My best,
Kelly

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you so much for stopping by to give me a read. i will return the favor soon!

[closed]

very nice
alot of imagery and emotion in the lines

the way it ends is almost haunting, the longing behind its expression

great craftwork

poet^

[Dana Alsamsam]

thanks so much for stopping by and giving me a read!

[closed]

of course

[ron]

That seems to be the problem. We write of thingsw e want but in reality its not what we are like some times. I like the wy you discribed what is felt.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thanks so much for stopping by and giving me a read!

[ron]

Your welcome

[shallimarRose]

Dana I am floored by this.. I never thought of it this way.. Your words drew blood..
"i wish you loved me like the characters
that flow from the tip of your pen. "

I think there are many wives (husbands) that sit alone at night because the artistic need pulls with a great undertow.. excellent poem and the title was what drew me to read.. shallimarRose

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you so much for stopping by and giving me a read. i'm really glad that this piece was able to reach you in the way it did- means a lot :)

[shallimarRose]

You're welcome Dana..

[17thWhitePrince]

Definately a most sincere statement
It can be true of poets that they love to write
And that which is written is truly loved
And how you may come to feel left out because the words therein are more often thought of
And analyzed and complimented and romanticized than you
It's sad really

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you for stopping by and giving me a read!

[Traci]

I am continuously impressed by the depth of honesty and emotion portrayed in each one of your writes. This one is no exception, and is another favorite, added to my library.

"I wish you loved me like the characters
that flow from the tip of your pen."

On the surface it appears to be a beautiful thing, but having dated a writer once I think much differently now, and can relate to this piece.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you so much! your kind words really do mean a lot to me :)

[rubie]

Wonderful poem! I think it's a double-edged sword of sorts; to be in love with a poet (I'm guessing here) would be so amazing in so many ways, someone so sensitive, genuine and intelligent. Yet, in other ways, it could prove frustrating to be pushed aside so that the creative mind can expand.

A mutual friend directed me to your writing, and I'm so glad he did...for I never would have stumbled upon this gem otherwise.

[Dana Alsamsam]

wow thank you so much rubie! i'm glad you decided to stop by and give me a read. i will most definitely return the favor sometime very soon :)

[rubie]

Thank you! Looking forward to your visit!!

[Angi]

I have never had a relationship with a poet. I am married to a working man. He is all about fixing and creating things with his hands. I wouldn't have it any other way. I get strange and temperamental when I am in the midst of writing. I cannot imagine two of us. This was very well done. It flowed well down to a perfect ending. Angi~

[Dana Alsamsam]

there's a very interesting dynamic between two of the same trade... thank you so much for stopping by and reading and for your insight!