north line metra

feeling fresh,

estranged

and pleasantly 

alone,

i think about

not getting off

at my stop. 

does it even matter

where i end up? 

the metra helps me

escape, 

but somehow 

evasion blurs

into the same

meaning

as taking me

home. 

Reviews

[Ohhhwillow]

As human beings we are both drawn to the unknown and afraid of it because we see life as a linear "journey", during which predictability can assure the future, and possibly drain the colour from it. What an adventure, to get off in an unknown place and spread your wings; what a panic when our pockets burn out. The words you isolate to lines of their own are to me significant -
"estranged", "alone", "escape", "meaning", "home".
Together they summarise flight, and the emotions drawn from such change.
You say so much in so little - very impressed!

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you so much for your thoughtful review! it's so interesting that a train that goes in a straight line can take us on so many jagged journeys...i always believe that one word lines must be earned in my work so i'm glad you noticed them :) thanks again!

[Clockwork]

I've always wondered what would happen if I just chose not to get off at my stop. In most cases, I guess I would just end up at 30th Street Station in Philly with any number of possible destinations to go to. Although, I know your speaking of a different metro line in your town.

I also really liked those lines that Sami pointed out. I think they have a real way of sticking with me. Also, I thought the question "does it even matter/where i end up?: gives this piece a very strong inevitability. Almost like no matter what path you take is going to lead to the same endpoint. Thank you for sharing as always, Dana.

[Dana Alsamsam]

being on public transport alone always makes me think about that. why not just get off somewhere else? or not get off? we always do what we've planned. thanks for your review :)

[Clockwork]

You're welcome :-) now that you've mentioned it, I think I'll give it a try sometime.

[Sami Khalil]

"escape,

but somehow

evasion blurs

into the same

meaning

as taking me

home. "
I like the whole poem and especially the ending ...Thank you for penning...:)

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you for your kind review!

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)