The Quiet World

(In the stylings of Jeffrey McDaniel who wrote another poem called The Quiet World)

In an effort to get people to listen

To the dying art of talk radio,

And also to appease the deaf,

The government has decided

To ban music of all kinds

Within country borders.

My violin whimpers in the corner

Wishing for a human hand, the only

Thing that can make it beautiful.

I tell the piece of wood

To quiet itself, this is a new world.

In the car I drive without music.

Slowly I strip my closet of color.

Take the artwork off of the walls.

I shower in lukewarm water.

I no longer put sugar in my tea.

On the television I only watch news..

I stare and smile. Empty.  

I am adjusting well to the new way.

Late at night I lie in bed,

And wait for the thoughts that cage

Me in wakefulness, but lately I feel them

Whisper past me like smoke,

And watch blankly as the thoughts

Slip out of my ears to go live

On their own.

And without music, the thoughts

That have left will never

Come back home.

Reviews

[Traci]

An eloquent write, Dana. Outstanding word play and imagery. I can't imagine a world without music. After reading this, it left me thinking about how we take so much for granted, never really appreciating the little things in life. Well penned, my friend, keep up the good work.

[Dana Alsamsam]

wonderful, thank you so much! it was meant to make you think so that is the greatest complement you could give. thanks for stopping by and giving me a read!

[Traci]

always my pleasure.

[xxlheart]

what a great and vocal piece. love the second stanza!

[Pete Langley]

You can never stop music....it is the balm on the wounds of the world. Beethoven, Springsteen, Dvorak, Presley et al will watch over us till the cows come home. Nil desperandum, Dana, and well done! P.

[sparkle]

once again great work .. you are totally talented girl .. keep it up :)

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you so much!

[chaotic katie]

love the word choices in this piece! beautiful imagery as well.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thanks for your always kind reviews!

[chaotic katie]

anytime :)

[Astro]

A slow death put to paper this one Dana. I would curl up and die if life outlawed music. O.K. probably not, more likely I'd set up a pirate radio station like in 'Pump up the Volume' and talk hard between songs and dream about the 'Eat me Beat me Lady'. Or maybe throw impromptu concerts all over until I was brought down and put to death...smiling and humming a tune.

[Dana Alsamsam]

I would travel right along side you and become a rebel force bringing music and joy to anywhere we travel in a very secretive and bad a*s fashion. i'm glad this evoked emotion in you; it's almost meant to make us music lovers feel uncomfortable. thanks for reading!

[Astro]

Your very welcome Dana, I was briefly incensed by the thought of that horrible scenario, but knowing I'd have company makes me feel that much better. Hail the Rebellion

[B-poet]

I know exactly where you're coming from with this compelling write here. A lot of times its just better to delute the noise and nuisances of life out of our daily routines. Life does seem a lot more enjoyable in more ways than one when we actually go through with it. Excellent write. :)

[Dana Alsamsam]

thanks for the insightful review! i really think that we just take some things for granted and we take routine for granted. someone once sad that ocean creatures eventually stop hearing the sound of the waves and that's the horror of routine. so yea. thank you again!

[Archangel Gabriel]

Eloquent is the word for this questioning piece.

[Tomahawk Joe]

An eloquent point in pleasantly flowing words

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you for reading and for your kind words!

[LapseOfMind]

Wow, I would absolutely hate to live in that world. I would not adjust. Nice poem on how I don't want life to ever be.

[Dana Alsamsam]

yes it would be awful.... but the fact that they adjusted is to show the ignorance and how people just go along with whatever authority asks them to do. thank you for reading!

[LapseOfMind]

Well, it is sad but true when said that people are sheep. Luckily, there are a few of us that are wolves dressed as sheep. It makes me wonder, at times, what people think when they just believe all of authority and follow what mainstream media feeds them. Humanity is pretty damn lame