To the Rain

I listen to you sing

Off key, and it lulls me

To sleep. White noise

Everywhere, like silence,

But not empty.

Thank you

For letting me sit,

Pathetically, beneath

Your forgiving fingers

Which caress my

Lips, and ask me

For a smile.

Thank you

For befriending

My shameful tears

And washing them away

As if they’re

Long lost cousins.

Thank you

For your consistent

Heartbeat, and the patter

Of your lively feet

Reminding me that the world

Is larger than just this,

That the flood comes

Long after I’ve gone.

Thank you

For whispering into my ear,

As clandestine as the rustle

Of an autumn leaf,

What I always

Seem to forget:

It’s okay to eat cereal

For dinner. It’s okay

To sing off key. It’s okay

To be broken. It’s okay

To wear your heart

On your sleeve.

Reviews

[Rahul]

Very nice and a touchable poem that i got by you...it's truly a nice poem and i love this piece much..even in real i enjoyed this piece from my heart. you made my day, i woke up and read firstly your this stuff and you really made my day. i loved youse IInd last stanza much. you put me in a situation to think about rain.
I'm missing Monsoon after read this piece.
well penned write.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you so much for reading and for your kind words!

[Rahul]

It's always a pleasure to me reading youse.
But, hey , may i know did you write it since or when ..lol ...there was raining ?

[Dana Alsamsam]

i wrote this on a sunny day thinking about how lovely it would be if it had been raining... then i began to get nostalgic about rain itself.

[Rahul]

Ohh...i see, i thought you made it when there was raining because this piece's so nice and heartful and showed some reality to me and i thought this nice piece's written in rainy days because it showed reality...but you're saying that you made it in sunny one's so, it's greatful much to me, because so much nice and a deep and a real piece you made in sunny days...i wanna appreciate your thinking and moreover your imaginations...
you really confused me once again by reality. your imagination power is strong i think if you can think in this way then why don't you try to write some books ?
i know you can visualize some characters too. anyway, nice;y penned once again as usual.
and try to write some books...especiallly try to write on rain..lol :) i'd love to read.

[Dana Alsamsam]

ah thank you! maybe one day i'll have thoughts worthy enough for the pages of a book

[Matt]

Great poem. How you reference the sound of the rain in the environment really enhances the piece.
Very comforting words.

[Dana Alsamsam]

comforting just like the fall of rain- thank you for reading and for your kind words!

[Matt]

Your welcome. Keep up the good work.

[Clockwork]

I think this poem is a beautiful display of friendship and love. It seems that the person who offers comfort in this poem truly knows the meaning of healing. I really liked the lines from the third stanza thanking that person who offers comfort:

"For befriending
My shameful tears
And washing them away
As if they’re
Long lost cousins.

Those lines are truly beautiful.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you so much for reading and for your kind words!

[Clockwork]

You're welcome!

[Steven]

Great. Just great. Highlighting the things we inadvertently appreciate always makes good poetry.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, this is powerful...you have such a way with phrasing...."washing them away as if they're long lost cousins"

love that.

and i like the theme here (at least what i take from this)

that yes, it is okay to fall apart, wear our heart on our sleeve, be broken!

to be human..why are people so afraid to show vulnerability?

we always have to be so "on" just to keep up appearances and perceptions..
the hell with that!!!!!!!!

i've fallen apart many times..and am not ashamed to show it or admit it later.
but we survive don't we?

good writing again..
have really enjoyed visiting your page..and will be back.

jacob

[Dana Alsamsam]

your kind words mean so much to me; thank you! i, myself, tend to hide emotion or that i ever fall apart. and yes, this is about exactly what you said. i'm basically thanking the rain for reminding me that i don't HAVE to be perfectly put together all the time. the rain lets us be weak.

[Michael G. Smith]

Heart warming charm like when mom gives in to the child and joins you in a bowl of ice cream for dinner's main course.

[Dana Alsamsam]

incredible comparison, thanks for reading!

[ChemicalMadness]

I love your pace, your phrasing, your formatting....but mostly your voice here. Strong and full of quiet truth. This one really sort of fell together for me, if that makes sense as a compliment.....

CM

[Dana Alsamsam]

definitely makes sense, thank you so much for reading!

[B-poet]

Cadences for what really matters the most in life. The sounding of rain drops hitting a window pane soothes the soul. Great write. :)

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you so much for reading!

[Melissa]

I really love this. It's beautiful and with soul.