Thigh Gap

true story, happened in physics.

“I want to be you.”

Said the delicate blonde girl

With the inquisitive blue eyes

 

Why would anyone, anyone at all,

Especially anyone

With talent and inquisition like hers,

Want to be like me?

Me, a seemed statue of Aphrodite

Who allows a conveyer belt of thoughts

To hold me hostage in wakefulness

Allowing the quarters of my life

To quarter me in quarters

And corners

And destroy me

And checkerboard me

With red and black.

 

Why would anyone who is anyone

Want to be anyone like me?

 

“I want to be you.”

Said the pretty blonde girl

With inquisitive blue eyes.

The cobalt gems flickered

Up at me, blind

To the checkerboard.

 

“I want to be you” She said

“Because you have a space

Between your thighs.”

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This is insanely good...honestly so. I mean, the offset portion of this piece was probably some of the best poetry that I've read in quite some time. I love the wordplay, and the honest, real way that this flowed. I love the deep metaphor at work here...wow. I think this deserves another read.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you so incredibly much for reading and for these kind words! i'm glad you enjoyed it:) my best poetry happens unexpectedly; this is one of those that was written in a frenzy on my notes in class.

[SteveB]

Well done. I truly loved the counterplay between the :inquisitive eyes" and her blindness. Excellent wordplay in "your" section of the piece. the image of a conveyor elt of thoughts, the checkerboard all well written and thought out. And as a sucker for aliteration the third stanza sang to me.
Thank you.

[Dana Alsamsam]

often times those who are most inquisitive, those who analyze the most, are blind when they cannot seem to envision the larger spectrum of things. it makes me very happy that that comparison meant something to you. thank you so much for reading and for your kind words!

[ChemicalMadness]

Steven nailed it. Oh those lines. Words to get lost in and even covet...within admiration, there always hides a child who covets.

Stunning.

CM.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you so much for reading:) when i think about those words my head kinda goes in circles. it's meant to make you read faster and faster through the whole indented section and get tangled in the words and then...it comes a full circle.

[Patrick O'Neil]

Must agree, with the rest, well written.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thanks for reading!

[Steven]

'Allowing the quarters of my life
To quarter me in quarters
And corners
And destroy me
And checkerboard me
With red and black.'

F**k, that's really good.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you! and thanks so much for reading