Can Never Be

So I had a dream last night..and got a poem from it.

The night is getting darker.

We're still laying in the sand. 

Side by side, alone together. 

I don't want this to ever end. 

I look over to you.

You look back at me. 

I see you smile..

and notice the cute dimple in your cheek. 

You lean in...

give me a quick kiss..

then all of sudden..

I lose feeling of your lips.  

I've woken up,

and snapped back to reality..

I remember now.. 

you and I, can never be. 

Author's Note

This is actually about a guy I know that I'm totally in love with...such a typical teenage girl, I know....but I had a dream and I wrote about it soooooo yeaaa

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

The daydreams and real life. Never the same.
"I've woken up,
and snapped back to reality..
I remember now..
you and I, can never be. "
I liked the flow of thoughts leading to the very good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

i really like the rawness of this. I think it portrays a sense of sweet longing and youth. Great piece

[D.T.]

Thanks for reading..glad you liked it!

[alf]

So very Sorry!! As I hit send, I saw the typo. didn't mean D.Y. at all. please read D. T.!!!

[D.T.]

It's okay, lol.

[alf]

Hi D.Y. And don't you just hate to wake up to reality!!!! So crushed by that fact it was only a dream!!! I so love this poem!!! You have depicted this so very well!!! hate secret deires, and secret loves, but just so loved this write!! alf

[D.T.]

Thank you! (:

[GreenEyedPoet]

Haha I've had dreams like this, doesn't it suck waking up from them? lol.

I really liked this piece D.T, great job. :]

[D.T.]

yea..haha..thank you!

[Ibidun]

I've had millions of this sort of dream. Its funny when I wake up and find out that it was all a dream. It is good to know that we all dream and we all fall in love. Nicely written, thanks for sharing.

[D.T.]

Lol..thank you!

[Anuj kaushik]

By reading this poem ...i realize that even a single factor addition to the poem can make it very special. And here that factor is Dream. Noticing of a dream that can be crafted into a poem is very inspiring for me.
And expression of emotions like we feel in dream and after dream is very well done.

[D.T.]

Thanks for the review and for reading! (:

[Bonnie]

I can relate to your dream and waking. I can relate to the sadness of loving someone with whom it is not going to be. Thanks for sharing and vulnerability.

[MFrano1]

This is really good. It has a great rhyme scheme, you follow a discernable plot, and the twist at the end is so unexpected. The last lines are my favorite, albeit my least. They just flow so perfectly and rhyme so well. This poem is also disappointing because you want the girl to be with him :( that being said... I hope you do!

[D.T.]

Yea.lol...thank you! That was really kind!

[MFrano1]

Sure thing!

[Nadia B.]

Wow!!! So many different emotions in such short poem, really enjoyed! Love the rhyme scheme you chose as it fits so well, how you set the scene, then build up to a climax and throw a twist at the end. Absolutely wonderful, please keep writing!

[D.T.]

Thank you so much..(: