After My Last Drink

I want to tear you off
like the arms of my black jean jacket.
Our love was not enough;
I stitched your heart on my sleeve.

In dead-sure whispers, I say:
"this trouble is but a process";
seeing pictures past, I pray:
"this struggle is such progress".

While dancing to our tune,
I grasp my well-torn brain.
While crooning to the moon,
I sing through cellophane.

The fire-pit winter completes;
woe, I crackle in the ashes.
My room's warmth depletes;
mold saturates my matches.

Why did she re-sew our quivering quilt?
She's seen my helpless eyes.
A needle's simply incapable of guilt;
a tailor threads demise.


XX/9/2013

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

she tried to sew us back together but i kept drinking us apart.

and he is guiltless only because he can hardly remember anything he did to tear off the sleeve of the relationship...

very sad write...but her understanding shines through...she feels his pain...and forgives.

[Dalton]

Thank you Jacob! After reading your words, I'm understanding this poem in a completely different manner.
Grateful,
D

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Your rhyme schemes are so immaculately written that they catch one by surprise. For me, I feel a bit of anger in this poem, a feeling of wasted time, a fire that is no more, and then a rekindling of that fire. I love your language. It's masculine in tone ... denim poetry. Love it!

[Dalton]

Your review comes as a surprise, for the points you've mentioned are not completely obvious in the lines. I felt all of the points you mentioned, experientially, during that relationship. Perhaps, collectively you too have experienced something similar, given that you were able to recognise such. If the presumption is right, I'm glad that another person resonates with me.
You've mentioned before the masculine tone of my writing, and I'm rather happy that it continually comes through.
Thank you dear,
D

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

It seems we've walked parallel to one another at times. We then whisper that walk through poetry. :-)

[Dalton]

Yes indeed :) you've said it truly, and beautifully.