Shooting Stars

My tears traced your collarbones today

And as I was watching them fall

They looked like little shooting stars

If I could have wished upon them

Maybe

Maybe we’d finally be happy

Reviews

[I Am Svetlana]

This reminded me of the final moments of a relationship after two people have realized how broken they've really become and made each other. Very powerful words and imagery you portray. We all have our wishes and hopes. Love is no fairytale...but we all must make the best of it.

[Duckey]

This is amazing, the amount of emotion and meaning you have put into such a small amount of words is stunning. The meaning is so clear and you have used some very strong imagery that really evokes the readers emotions. I love this piece also because it is so relate-able, and i know this feeling very well. amazing work, I really like this! Keep it up xx

[Sydnie J]

This was beautiful. Simplistic beauty demonstrating the final moments of a relationship. I found this very relatable, as I've had this exact scenario happen before.

[wordsofheart]

Short and deep. The theme is very beautiful.Nice work!

[Noor.92]

Very Nice piece of writing....

[ksscampos]

Heartfelt. With limited words you expressed your hurt. great write thanks for sharing

[Sunny]

Aww, this is so sweet! and very heartfelt, keep it up!

[Dakota Jean]

Thank you!

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Very good indeed. It's alway difficult to lay feelings in a short poem. But you've succeeded very well. I like it.

[Dakota Jean]

Thank you so much (:

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what has already been said is so true...this is short and powerful...and what an image..."tears tracing collarbones"

lovely thought...

if only we could wish upon those tears...that would be a lot to wish upon...

thank you for this piece.

jacob

[Dakota Jean]

Thank you (:

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

This is such an amazing piece. Its so simply put and yet so thought provoking. i really loved the originality of comparing a teardrop to a shooting star. Well done.

[Dakota Jean]

Thank you (: