Money and Children

Introduction

Mr Jawad is a rich man. However, he was raised in a poor family.  He has worked as a manager in his a famous company in Casablanca for twenty years. His sons have been given key positions in international companies.

Mr Karim is a wealthy man. He also has worked as a manager in his famous company however  karim’s son took drugs.

Chapter 1 : Karim’s family was in shock

 

Mr Karim is sixty years old. He is elegant. He always wears expensive suits, new shiny shoes. He is tall. He has a fair complexion, dark black eyes, and curly black hair. He is handsome.

When he calls his customers, he is very kind but when he is with his employees, he speaks loudly and he is aggressive. He believes in one thing, money is the root of all problems.

Karim’s wife is called Amina. She is attractive. She has big, blue eyes, silky wavey black hair. She is tall, intelligent and cheerful.

After working long exhausting hours he returns home to his wife, Amina . Over dinners, each evening they resume their discussions about new projects and ideas that will make them more money. They are money mad. Both of them focus solely on money, from eight o’clock in the morning to eleven o’clock in the evening.

They drive expensive cars. They spend a lot of money on lavish parties, though they neglect themselves.

The more they earn money, the less their desire to spend. They are meticulous in the art of stinginess they won’t rest until they have asked all their friends, colleagues, neighbor about the details of finding the best quality in anything for the lowest price.

When, Amina meets her friend Malika at the gym club.

 Amina says things like, “Last weekend, I had a good time with my husband Karim in Paris. As usual, we bought the latest trends in fashion, you know, the usual clothes as a fur, suits, shoes, skirts, shirts …”

“For me, I spent this weekend in Malaga. It’s my favorite destination, I like Malaga’s beach,” says Malika.
    
“I plan to travel to Brazil this summer. I prefer to go to Brazil’s beachs. It’s sunny, people are fun and friendly, there.” says Amina.

Ultimately, Amina must be seen to be wealthier and more powerful than her friends. Her goal is to stay ahead of others and  make her family thrive.

Karim’s daughter is called Donia. She is short. She has silky, wavy brown hair, big green eyes and a wide smile. If there is something that she wants to do, she does it. She is smart and serious. She is also the owner of an architectural design company.

She worked as well her father. She has always worked to the highest quality standards. She plans to grow her company more and more but she is selfish and egotistical.

She only maintains relationships with those who can help further her career or status. She despises anyone else especially the poor unless she can use them.

 
One day, her mother Amina asked her for twenty thousand dollars in order to buy something but she didn’t give her not one cent.

“I need my money to invest into projects that are going to make me more money. I can’t waste it on lending it out anyone, anymore” said Donia.

Karim’s son is called Adil. He is tall like his father.He has a curly black hair, a fair complexion, and dark black eyes.He has never had a goal. His life path has always been traced out by his parents. He has never understood the value of money since he has never done an honest day’s work in his life. 

Since graduating he has done nothing with his life, just enjoying himself with friends. 

Next, he fell in love with a girl called Mouna but his 
mother Amina hates her because she is poor. She is 
looking for a wealthy girl for her son, so he must wait for his mother’s choice.

Last week-end, Adil rented a house near the beach in the suburb of Casablanca with his friends who were a bad influence but they had a lot of fun.

After they had drank way too much, so one of his friends gave him a large amount of drugs.

After that, Adil collapsed and lost consciousness. One of theim took him to hospital, then the doctor who saved his life, called Karim to the emergency department.

Karim thought about his son all the way to the hospital.

He told himself, “I don’t understand it. I have tried to give my son everything so that he never had to struggle in life. Money, a good education, a great lifestyle, so why? Why does my son need to take drugs? I didn’t even know he was on drugs. Maybe, I focused too much on the business, Maybe, I didn’t give him enough of my time. My responsibilities at work keep me so busy. But I’ve worked hard to pave the way for him.”

Amina and Karim were frightened. Their eyes were hid a deep sadness.  They were in shock.

Amina cried and said, “I’m responsible, I gave him money but I didn’t ask him where he spent his spare time. I thought, he was just enjoying himself but he was in a bad company.”

“We are both responsible, I’m too. I should have been careful. I should not have given him, money, anymore”. Said Karim

 

They feel so sad. They had failed to raise him well.

Later, Karim and Amina arrived at Hospital, and they went to doctor Omar. They asked him to explain Adil’s situation to them.

“Adil’s situation is not good. We have discovered that he has been taking drugs for five years, so we have to keep him in this hospital for at least three months to rehabilitate him off the drugs, again.” Omar replied.

Chapter 2 : Jawad’s Wisdom

Jawad is tall, average build. He has straight, dark hair, 
big black eyes. He is delightful, serious and a gentle man.He makes everyone laugh with him. He has struggled in this life in silence. 

He never complains, he is grateful for what he has. He 
is fifty four years old. He doesn’t care about trendy clothes. He wears usual clothes like jeans and T-shirt. 

He is very geeky. He participates in the big event and meeting.

Jawad was raised in a poor family but he accomplished 
 all his goals. He is among the twenty richest men in my 
country.

His parents didn’t go to University but they brought him 
up well.

His parents have instilled the best values in him like principals, respect, relationship with others, love, compassion.....

His parents taught him about dignity to keep his chin up and be grateful for what he has.

Another way in which he managed to change his destiny was through his own fortitude, own confidence and own individual hard work.

Jawad is a modest man. Even though he is the owner of a big company of technology, he is very kind with his employees.

He is understanding and lovable. He taught his employees to love science. He often had time to talk to employees about their problems, so he helped them, too.

He empowered them to move beyond their circumstances. His goal was to be the ideal manager.

They love him more than anyone so, they work above and beyond their contracted hours without compensation.

Later, Karim made an appointment with Jawad in a nice café to discuss a good solution for his son.

Karim asked his best friend Jawad.“I just want to understand one thing. Why did my son Adil take drugs? He has everything he needs.”said Karim.

“Needless to say, your money could not have bought everything, you give money to your son but you should have known who his friends were? Where they spent their spare time? ” said Jawad.

Karim said, “I didn’t pay attention to his friends although I made sure that his friends were very rich. They were raised with wealth and resources like my son Adil.”

“My Lord created us, so he is so strong enough to nourish. Watered us and cared for. People die less from starvation and more a lack of good upbringing.

Know one truth! Money is just a means to an end. Don’t make it  your purpose for living. Money can help us in life but it can also be the root of evil, can’t it? Your children could hurt themselves with it, too.

You are Lord of your family. You gave them money but you didn’t guide them, as well.

Our universe was created and guided by My Lord. We have a sun that shines every day, we have a blue sky, blue beaches, green forests, nature, moon, Earth, stars…..All move in harmony through the care of my Lord, so  we are responsible for following the path set out for our children until they will reach twenty one years old.

After that, the only thing left for us to give is our advice so that we might remain close to them, as well.

Unless you raise your children well, no amount of inheritance will benefit them.

After that, your money and your children will become punishment for you. 

However, if you leave behind good children with a good education it is better than leaving behind a billion dollars because they will be our light in this life.

Wherever they are, they are reliable, modest, generous, compassionate, merciful, honest ….kind and friendly people. So it will be the biggest reward for your soul.

Karim has been affected by Jawad wisdom, so he has decided to pay close attention to his children.

Before guiding them on the right path in life, he seeks to understand their needs instead to be understood.

He tries to understand their problems by getting into the roots and helps them to overcome their issues more effectively.

His children are at the top of his top priority instead of his money.

Karim realized that money is not everything. The key to his life and that of his children is ensuring and affording them a safe and loving upbringing.

©2015 Dakir Abderrahmane

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree with the ending and the wisdom shared.
":Karim realized that money is not everything. The key to his life and that of his children is ensuring and affording them a safe and loving upbringing."
Our children are our wealth. Thank you for sharing the outstanding story.
Coyote



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[Abderrahmane Dakir]

Thank you so much Coyote for your wonderful comment.

[theReverie]

wow . Such a fascinating story. It reminds of the story my mother used to tell me . About the fisherman and the genie in the bottle. The Fisherman wished for everything that he touched would be gold so that he would be rich. And so after granting that wish the man ran home to his family touching everything in his way. Joyously, he went home and called for his wife and his children and out excitement , he hugged his children together with his wife and poof they became gold.

Your story is such an eye opener to those who were blinded by riches. You're very inspiring . I hope I could write one as good as this too.

[Annacate]

I loved this story. It really hit home with me as a single mom on a budget who has, at times, felt guilty about not being able to give my child the 'extras.' It reaffirmed that the time I spend with my child is more important. Thank you for this.

[beach0324]

I love your comments about your child that's is how I feel about mine

[Warrior]

Great story telling. This did justice in the realm of getting the message across. Great message. There's lot of times where a story can have a great message to aim for, and have a lot of under lining things but then no one gets it, and if no one gets it, then the point has failed. But in my opinion this did well to get the message across. You made it clear, which is why I think it's good. Keep up the good work. What was also great was that I could imagine the story as I read it, and that is also a strong point of stories. The ability to have the reader imagine it because after all we're reading not watching it, but it was as if I was there as I read this, and that is great. Great visuals and great story telling. It had plot and substance. When you add substance to writing it gets that much better. It gets the reader hooked on it and make them feel as if they are part of it. As long as their is that emotional connection between the reader and the story then it's good. The connection you were able to established in the writing gives the reader a sense of comfortably that they are in tune with the writing. So that way when the writing is over, the reader wants more, and wishes it didn't end. I feel the same way when I watched a movie or tv series that I get so attached to, I never want it to end. And for this writing, I didn't want it to end. You had me hooked, and I am sure everyone else who read it was hooked as well. That is good, that is what you want for people to keep wanting more. The way you put the story together makes me feel like my life is different for that moment in which I read your story. I love it, and it was beautiful. Just keep posting stories like this, and you'll have a good following.

[1Disawsum]

Well, here's the truth: the telling of the story was extremely boring, but the moral was good. There is too much showing and telling, and not enough of the five senses were used in creating an image of the characters. To really be involved in a book, the reader needs to be engaged by the writing style- which I personally am not- and the reader needs to be able to paint a picture of the character(s), put a voice to the character and feel a connection to the character(s). Or at least be able to feel a connection to the story. Right now, I'm not engaged, and it feels like that you are half-heartedly writing this. Added to this is that there are so many spelling errors, and the sentences are disjointed and the story overall does not flow very well. This story did not engage me at all, and to improve, I'd suggest make the connection between yourself and the story first; put more care, effort and start nurturing your story into life. Good luck

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

Thank you for reading.

[Mental Drifter]

I was asked to review this short story. I have to say that I didn't make it very far into the story. Mr. Dakir, I believe in being honest when giving reviews. I do not intend to insult, I am hoping what i say will be considered honestly and reflected on, leading to a greater understanding.

The reason I could not get very far into this story is the application of tell instead of show. I am sure there are many people here who have thorough descriptions about it, but I will be simple. Telling in this context is giving information, while showing pulls the reader into your story.

For instance this part here:
"Mr Karim is sixty years old. He is elegant. He always wears expensive suits, new shiny shoes. He is tall. He has a fair complexion, dark black eyes, and curly black hair. He is handsome."

This is telling, it reads as if you have copied notes from your character profile. You want to place the reader into a scene that is in your head. Describe the grey in his hair, or the wrinkles in his face. Describe how his suit looks, how the light bounces off his shoes. How is he handsome? A way to do this is to narrate from his wife's perspective. Show her taking in the sight of him, and him taking in her. You can do this in a simple scene or a complex one. I hope this helps and if you have any questions feel free to mail me again, or ask them here.

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

Thank you for reading.

[Loui SE]

I liked the moral of the story. What I didn't like so much was the frequent use of names respectively pronouns, I would take some of the unnecessary ones out. For example:
Mr. Karim is 6o years old, elegant and always wears expensive suits with shiny shoes.
His tall body with his fair complexion in contrast to his black eyes and curly, black hair give him a handsome look"...
Otherwise, I quite liked it.

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

Thank you for reading.

[Madeleine Rose]

That was very good. I loved how you described all the characters!

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

Thank you for reading.

[Chris]

A life based on Karma...but at the end there usually isn't time nor a place to begin anew or make change.

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

Thank you for reading.

[Lady Celery]

I agree with what everyone else is saying, this is a really great story! It has a message that is very pertinent in today's world, and I think lots of people will be able to relate to it and learn something. That being said, there were some grammar issues but it looks like the other reviews have gone over that! I really love your approach to storytelling, especially because all of your stories have important lessons in them!

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

Thank you for reading.

[wordman]

i think it`s a great chapter and real life experiences
it will be a great book

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

Thank you for reading.

[Confuser]

Mr. Dakir: Another brilliant writing jam packed full of guidance and wisdom for all who read. The way you capture the readers attention is one sign of a great writer, and that you are sir. I have seen these situations with parents many times in my life. Parents that only want more and more, not giving proper attention to their children, looking down upon people that are poor, never even asking themselves, how did they become poor. What situations occurred to bring this person down so low, never ever would it occur to help. The wealthy elite, that think they are better. I loved the characters, they are well defined, your descriptions are perfect, and I simply couldn't stop reading. No way, you grabbed my attention from the beginning. I hope many people will read this story, for it will make them think, and hopefully see the world a little differently. The key is always the parents. I was taught early on to work; my parents had money: I would never ask them, but knew they would provide it if needed. The same with my children: my 14 year old son, asked just yesterday, when can I begin working? I am proud that he is thinking ahead and desire to work. Just fabulous writing, once again.

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

Thank you for reading. Your comment is amazing. It helps me to keep writing more and more... Thank you again.

[Confuser]

You're welcome, but THANK YOU....your stories help ME, become a better parent, much insight and will do the same, I pray, for others that read.