Your Smile

For everyone that give us a wonderful smile that give a joy to any person's heart

Your smile incites all our
Thoughts to be relaxed within your sight
Troubles to be melted in your path,
Senses to be mesmerized in your eyes
Issues to be solved upon your ways,
Feelings to be excited by your voice
Worries to be dissolved into your waves.

Your smile helps us to
Follow our passion of discovery
Seek our desire in priceless treasury,
Read our books in the library
Improve our skills in major literary
Expand our essay to a well-read story
Find our love poetry.

Your smile changes our
Loneliness to togetherness
Darkness to lightness,
Ruthlessness to forgiveness
Sadness to happiness,
Weaknesses to strengths
Illness to healthiness,
Weariness to willingness
Awkwardness to smoothness,

Selfishness to selflessness.

Your smile allows us to
Immediately take a while to rest
Efficiently do our very best,
Confidently stand on our two feet
Brightly achieve any tough feat
Bravely face our given fate,
Spontaneously increase our personal faith
Repeatedly seeing you with bated breath,
Patiently learn the longing of wait
Modestly have will power extremely great,

Definitely forget our last defeat
Truly have sensation we never felt
Completely succeed all our tests
Absolutely deserve all our gifts.

Abderrahmane Dakir

Reviews

[Confuser]

Mr. Dakir: I am still smiling at this uplifting story/prose! There is one other writer than that gives uplifting works like yours (especially this one). You are very talented and your idea of "Your Smile" in brilliant when accompanied by such flowing imagery and beautifully worded reminders of what a smile can do: Everyone can learn a thing or two or 20 from reading your sage words. It makes me to remember just how truly a smile is to others, and in doing so myself, it will come back around; glowing descriptions that have brought me much happiness. So well done. Bravo, once again, and I thank you. Dale

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

Thank you so much. I realy enjoyed about your comment.

[Confuser]

My pleasure....Dale

[Kavin D Dhiraj]

Hi there! That was a good one. I liked it. You have played with words. Very positive. What all a smile can do!

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

Thank you so much.

[Aries1984]

I like your choice of wording in this poem. But I was a bit confused because when I started reading this piece, it seemed like it's supposed to be something rather romantic. Your use of plurality, using "we" and "our" is what got me thinking if this is a love poem or could this be a tribute to someone you and your family cared about?

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

Thank you so much. I think any beautiful smile give a joy to any person's heart That way I use the subject "We".

[Aries1984]

I get it now.

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Even though no particular person was specified, I felt that it was narrated from the perspective of men who look upon female muses (could be a mother, could be a sister, could be a partner in life) who smile to them and inspire them to do great and positive things. That was a very inspirational and optimistic write. Thank you for sharing!

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

Thank you so much. Your comment is wonderful like your writing.

[SweeTLoU]

Very nice piece makes me think of special someone

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

Thank you so much.

[Lizzie Mitchell]

very sweet poem
it's like an ode to someone's smile
very nice

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

Thank you so much.

[Sami Khalil]

An encompassing review and right on definitions of the smile. Smiles as well as your lovely writes bring joy and serializations to feast upon. Excellent...:)...........

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

Thank you so much.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).......

[Chris]

It left a nice "aftertaste" in my mind. Thanks for asking me to come by and hear it.

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

Thank you so much.

[613]

This poem felt quite a bit different from others I've read on Writer's Café. I enjoyed the tone & the flow of the piece. It was written well, too. I look forward to reading more from you!

- Brittney

P.S. Would you mind checking out my novel, HIM? Before sending it off for publishing, I'd love it if I could have as much constructive criticism as possible. (:

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

Thank you so much. Sure I do it for HIM. Your comment is very well. I like it.

[613]

You're quite welcome!
& thank you very much!

[h d e rushin]

a smile can do all of this? Sure it can. It is the only human characteristic of or belonging to reality as perceived rather than as independent of mind. And I would add, the only characteristic that spurs
on conversation.

you have adequately spelled out the superpower of the smile and with your writing skill, have
pointed it out as eloquently as imaginable . A lovely write. But a far better thought.

dana

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

Thank you so much.