A soul's struggle to survive through the storms in the woods of the heart and mind.
It's been a long way, And there you are! My green canopy!
Bathed in dew, Storm-hit thrice last night, And yet...
Yet you sway in the morning breeze!
My Holy Mary! How you bask in this sunlit crease!
And they say a storm destroys. If that be true and you be wise, Then why she bled and suffered thrice ? Look how her wings are set ablaze, Yet see her feet that merrily sways.
It swooped and smashed, And cranked the tunes, It swapped at your brows, And grassy dunes. With your feet and its merry swing, You held the pieces of your broken wing, With a life to live and a song to sing, You knew you are more of a human being.
I wonder if you are fake! For my world is fake too, Then so am I, And so are you.
Yet they say a storm destroys. Then hold your faith if you are wise, For she hath bled and suffered thrice. Without a fall, without a tilt, Without a wither beneath, For faith it is that finally turned, The storm into her sheath.
But Hark! Behold! Does every happy face have a reason to cheer? Or is it but an art to hide that dreaded fear? Who is asking? Who is answering? We never stop to hear. For my world out there is in the wild too my dear.
the storms of the heart, the refuge in the forest of another...
survival...if we are both fake, then we are kidding ourselves that we are true to love...but i think those lines in the poem...are saying if you are fake, i will be fake with you...we need each other, one way or another.
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Thank You Jacob for this insightful review!
"the storms of the heart, the refuge in the fores.. read moreThank You Jacob for this insightful review!
"the storms of the heart, the refuge in the forest of another..." -- This line so beautifully merges our thoughts together!
And yes you got it right with your lines "if we are both fake, then we are kidding ourselves that we are true to love" That connects more to the meaning! But I absolutely love the other perspective you gave too. A different dimension I can work upon in my upcoming write-ups. Thank You :)
the storms of the heart, the refuge in the forest of another...
survival...if we are both fake, then we are kidding ourselves that we are true to love...but i think those lines in the poem...are saying if you are fake, i will be fake with you...we need each other, one way or another.
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8 Years Ago
Thank You Jacob for this insightful review!
"the storms of the heart, the refuge in the fores.. read moreThank You Jacob for this insightful review!
"the storms of the heart, the refuge in the forest of another..." -- This line so beautifully merges our thoughts together!
And yes you got it right with your lines "if we are both fake, then we are kidding ourselves that we are true to love" That connects more to the meaning! But I absolutely love the other perspective you gave too. A different dimension I can work upon in my upcoming write-ups. Thank You :)
'Then hold your faith if you are wise' Not all faith comes from the church, nor is it necessarily religious. We all need faith in ourselves or we begin to doubt our abilities. We all need that safe place within to replenish our souls. Good write.
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"We all need that safe place within to replenish our souls. " Absolutely wonderful Ted!
Truly.. read more"We all need that safe place within to replenish our souls. " Absolutely wonderful Ted!
Truly said and Thank You :)
dear Daisy... "You held the pieces of your broken wing"
is a beautiful line. I have found myself in that position.
As I have said before... your writing reminds me of
the talent of Leonard Cohen in "Hallelujah".
"You sway in the morning breeze. My holy Mary".
A lovely poem. truly, Pat
I don't know if i deserve that big a compliment! That's HUGE to be compared to one of the greatest s.. read moreI don't know if i deserve that big a compliment! That's HUGE to be compared to one of the greatest songwriter in the world and indeed "Hallelujah" is one of the best soundtracks I've heard! Thank you for this overwhelming feedback! :)
I also had to re-read this, to see if I could fully grasp the message . . . altho there are parts I can't put together, it doesn't really matter, becuz overall the writing is enjoyable & it leaves the reader with something to ponder. I like the way this could apply to nature (which is my own sanctuary) or it could be a person that feels as soothing as nature can. I also like the way it conveys how nature (be it a place or a person) is sturdy & steady, when it comes to the storms of life.
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Bang On! You got through the essence with which i wrote this poetry. It's all about the dangling emo.. read moreBang On! You got through the essence with which i wrote this poetry. It's all about the dangling emotions that arises within each of us and how they still exist together in faith through all the intricate conflicts of the heart and the mind. Thank You for the lovely feedback :)
I found this beautiful to read and was moved by it but once I finished I had to read it again because I didn't fully understand it. The tree, the swing all seemed so real but yet you question its reality and your own. I really liked what I read but fear it went over my head and my ability to understand. Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!
It's all about the dangling emotions that arises within each of us and how they still exist together.. read moreIt's all about the dangling emotions that arises within each of us and how they still exist together in faith through all the intricate conflicts of the heart and the mind(The conflicts --hence the questioning of the reality!) Thank You for the lovely feedback :)
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Ok I can now see what you were going for, it was (And there you are! My green canopy!) that mislead .. read moreOk I can now see what you were going for, it was (And there you are! My green canopy!) that mislead me to thinking it was about nature and its influence but then I read (If that be true and you be wise, Then why she bled and suffered thrice) that convinced me I was mistaken. Don't misunderstand me I like it I just didn't fully understand it, I went back and listened to it on my text to speech program and it sounds even better. It needs to read out loud for people to really appreciate it to its fullest.
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Thanks dear! Writers don't misunderstand. Just some new perspectives round the corner I guess. Glad .. read moreThanks dear! Writers don't misunderstand. Just some new perspectives round the corner I guess. Glad you made such an effort to see through my perspective and appreciate it in the best possible way. Thank You so much. Truly appreciate :)
A very interesting story in the poetry.
Yet they say a storm destroys.
"Then hold your faith if you are wise,
For she hath bled and suffered thrice.
Without a fall, without a tilt,
Without a wither beneath,
For faith it is that finally turned,
The storm into her sheath."
The above lines are true. The storm is the sheath of Nature. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote