One Perfect Mess

You came into her life unknowingly

You took all her sorrows and misery

You brought back the life she once threw away

You were the reason why she's alive each day.

You, to her, were a miracle

The reason why she believed she could win it all

You were her only darling dear. . .

You dulcet smile inspired her a lot

Yes, with you, she's most willing to tie the knot.

But hey girl, better wake up!

That knight in shining armour-

Was the one who put her damsel into distress

And now, she's nothing but the exact definition of..

"a perfect mess" 

Reviews

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

I can relate to this. Nice concept of standing on one's own.
The only thing was that, the point of view seems not constant as I see the first two stanzas, you're talking to the "knight", and then at the last, you're already talking to the girl. No offense, just a constructive view/comment.

By the way, Kabayan. I love your pen name. It sounds like my dreamed baby girl's name and my niece's brought together.

[daisyreelorraine]

..thanx Kabayan! :) my pen name is actually my real name..hehe..

and yes, i'm talking to the "used to be knight" on the first two stanzas, and then to the "damsel in distress" on the last one..this is to show the twist in the story, the poignant tragedy that ruined the both of them..

[Pax]

life is too imperfect to beat the perfect mess, the road to self healing is a long run, but it is worth a ride, the past is in the past isn't it.. :) very nice piece kabayan...

[daisyreelorraine]

Thank you Kabayan! :)

Everything is a learning experience. Everything's worth it. :)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Interesting illusion with a but as the price to pay later.

[daisyreelorraine]

nah, never can relate XD

just a product of my weirdest thoughts..lolz..