Circle of Guilt

..... when the mind breaks down

Left in a circle

muddling to find a path

the satellite watches me rip out the grass

knuckles bleeding, digging deeper into the abyss

did you ask me a question?

HEY YOU OVER THERE, DID YOU ASK ME A QUESTION?

I must look a little frenzied

perhaps a little delirious

I want to be invisible to my pain

my mind, yes... once I had a mind

now a mass of burnt live wires

smell the smoldering of my intelligence

it's melting away in the scorching heat

once I held the reigns, I sat in my chariot

thought I was God

my jaw held rigid so not to allow words of sentiment to seep through

but life is no dunce .... 

am I still in the circle?

don't want to find a way out!

my fingers tearing uncontrollably at my wretched clothes

to spill the venom from my pores

my tears flooding my throat, my screams can be heard beyond the blue moon

don't know anything anymore

leave me rot in this circle

cover my body with rocks

let the dirt regenerate me into fresh green grass

that just sways gently in the breeze and feels lush to the touch of a gentler soul

Reviews

[Pete]

very disturbing. the torment of the soul. such strong, dark imagery. beautifully written though. outstanding. you've captured the emotion so well, perhaps too well. so many great lines. 'my jaw held rigid so not to allow words of sentiment seep threw' - tripped me up a bit, i think you want 'to seep through' rather than 'seep threw'. i like how you stop everything and ask the question. very effective and clever. you're something else Hebe! great job my friend.

[Hebe]

Thank you Pete.... a slip of the pen, thanks for pointing it out.... so happy you liked it :)

[Pete]

awesome write Hebe. powerful!

[Hebe]

Your the best :)

[Bala Gorthi]

You have beautifully penned the the agony of a soul in great pain and turmoil. The call of soul Wishing for being regenerated into something beautiful to be felt by a gentle soul !
Very well expressed mental breakdown! There were situations where I myself felt like this.
Kudos to this write and you, Hebe. Thank you for sharing..

[Hebe]

Hi Bala, thank you my friend for your heart felt words. So sorry to hear of your agony... we all go through trials in this life... hopefully we come out of them to enjoy the green grass... hugs