Unveiled

ONE LINE STORY CONTEST Coming face to face with a psychopathic mind

I saw a glimpse of your soul, when you were distracted, 

and it revealed my kiss of death.

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Unveiled'
Hebe,
Was it fun to reach a thought of your own processed through the above story line? In reading it I thought; oh this is a realization of the reality of the danger of a psychopathic mind. It is an admitting and then left up to the reader. Do we turn away and stay safe or turn towards...Sometimes it is not our job to try to help I think.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Hope]

Its just a line but it still it holds a story.
I enjoyed the story, Hebe!

[Hebe]

Thank you my friend.

[WillaDanvers]

This holds so much intensity and simplicity at the same time, and as the others have said - horror at its finest. Each time, again and again you manage to create a work of art. Love reading you work!

[Hebe]

Hi Willa...thank you for your review: )

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

... Horror at its finest ...

[Tashida]

Hebe, Hebe, Hebe... You have got to tell me your secret. The amount of suspense you packed into that one line, coupled with that picture... I may as well have fainted. It was that good. I've re read that line a few times now. This is how I know you're a good writer. You just conveyed emotion, and excellent imagery in one line. I take my hat off to you. It was fantastic! I loved it :)
P.S.
Sorry for not reviewing sooner :(

[Hebe]

I love reading your reviews they put a smile on my face..... you have a great sense of humor :) im still reading your last poem, it really blew me away :)

[Tashida]

I'm glad I could make you smile. Always a pleasure Hebe :)

[matrixmark]

This would fir nicely with my tormentor and Zara.
A very interesting usage of words. You could easily see a stalker guy saying this to his prey.

A very powerful piece for me, as you can imagine, my mind went into overdrive when i read this. I love your style when you write such a simplistic piece but covers such a lot of what has happened behind the scenes or what is yet to come. You really to capture my attention by the bucketload and tour words hold in my mind for a while afterward such is the impact of your writing.


Mark.

[Hebe]

It's so funny I never even thought I could write any horror.... and now I find it just flows sometimes?? I think you influenced me ;) thank you for your words and inspiration...

[matrixmark]

Horror isnt easy to do. When you see it, it looks simple. When you try it, it's another matter. But you nail it everytime you put a piece on here. Keep doing what you are doing. I love your work, always have and always will. You are very kind in saying that i inspire you - that means a lot to me.

Mark.
Ps. Just don't ever expect me to write a poem - not going to happen...lol.

[Hebe]

oh come on... have you tried, you might be good, and you don't even know it!

[matrixmark]

I think i'll stick to scaring people with my writing. I dont wanna switch over to making people laugh with a poem...lol.

Mark

[Hebe]

Just send me one... a short poem (not one line lol!)
.... I'll start it off ... I saw her smile.....

[Bala Gorthi]

The most powerful one of the one liner stories I have read so far. Makes one heavy.thank you for sharing.

[Hebe]

Hi Bala, Powerful review thank you :)

[.]

Hmmm.....

Very nice words for a one line story contest. Brings to mind the proverb...."Danger and delight grows on the same stalk".

Very interesting.

[Hebe]

Something like that ! Thank you for your words.

[Pete]

powerful, ominous words. cool, troubling pic. i certainly wouldn't mess with any of that ...

[Hebe]

Thank you Pete... it was my take on coming face to face with a psychopathic mind....scary!