Bygone

I wear binoculars, seeing beyond my vision

and dance on a tight rope, dangling one leg in the wind

my mind plays tricks and tries to tell me what to do

I drift in and out of the obsolete

no reason to stay there, nothing good resides in that cesspool!

midnight hides my scars 

thats when I discovered the dishwasher 

I just stuffed everything in there with the promise everything would come out sparkling

truly the mind is ever so powerful

but only if it's in manual ... power steering is cheating

you might as well take a valium or two or three...

I hear myself laughing, let me tell you, it feels good

I delight in my own skin

I adjust the heat from the sun, no more getting burnt!

I can ask for six olives in my Dirty Martini

my skip has a jump in it.... it's ok I can say that if I want!

yes, my dues have been paid .... at least for now!

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Bygone'
Hebe,
To be good to oneself can take on a battle ratio. Your poem was like that for me. To just let go is not in my thinking but your light hearted writing was very welcome. Reading it through a couple times I was able to assimilate what made sense to me. Very figurative use. Six olives...yes that is good. Applying the sparkling of dirt now gone? You must have a special dishwasher. Hee, hee. Fun poem. We can always use some smiles. Thank you !
Blessings to you.
Kathy

[Tashida]

Hey Hebe so sorry I didn't review before now. I've just been kind of busy so I haven't really been on here as much as I would have liked to. I love the use of metaphor you have in this poem. The dishwasher one was particularly clever. This is a very lovely and eloquently worded (as usual) poem that to me spoke about having control over one's life. I loved it! Good job :)

[Hebe]

No worries... it's hard to run life and keep up with everything... thank you so much for stopping by :)

[Tashida]

You're welcome it was my pleasure :)

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A nicely written piece with a very lovely picture.

This reads to me as being about having control of one's mind and life; being in the drivers seat and steering one's course through life and not worrying too much about those little speed bumps which are evidently not important and not worth worrying about.

Some very interesting metaphors throughout, particularly the dishwasher reference. Nicely written poetry.

[Hebe]

Thanks Doodley... yes there comes a time when you have to enjoy life :) appreciate your review.

[Valentine]

We all just are, no one is perfect. Valentine

[Hebe]

Too true...... thank you Valentine.

[FreedomFighter]

Very powerful piece, I especially liked the power steering reference

[Hebe]

Thank you :)

[FreedomFighter]

of course!

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

I like the manner of writing, a flow of life in poetic form, from beginning to end. "midnight hides my scars," I like this line a lot. Tyfs

[Hebe]

Thanks Cyprian :)

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You're very welcome :)

[matrixmark]

Once again, you create such a wonderful piece. When I came to the word 'dishwasher' - I was like WTF. But then after reading on I totally get what you were saying.

You don't do things by halfs - you always go flat out in every piece that you do. This was no exception - just pure brilliance. Another magnificent piece.

Mark.

[Hebe]

Hi Mark.... how's it going? Hopefully your book is coming along!... thank you for your marvelous review :)

[Bala Gorthi]

what a way to look at life! I wear binoculars and look beyond life...... mid night hides my scar. I loved every bit of it.yes, my dues have been paid , at least for now. Amazing work!
Thank you for sharing, Hebe.

[Hebe]

Hi Bala... thank you sooo much :)

[Re-Pete]

speechless. my jaw is dropped. simply magnificent. i stand in awe. just awesome in every way. perfecto write. i didn't think it was possible, but you just outdid yourself again! :)

[Re-Pete]

most times, when i read your writing, i feel as though i wrote it. same words, images, thoughts & feelings as me. we're so in synch, scary. :)

[Hebe]

Lol ...i know what your thinking.... i feel like I'm in your head when i read your writing! ! Scary is right!.... thank you for your incedible review .. i had to wear a compression sock on my head so i could walk threw the door he he....:):)

[Re-Pete]

lol ... :)