Set in Stone

A journey with the ego

Set in stone

can't turn back

broken spirits left trodden in the street

streetlamp throws light on my face

exposing my imperfections

decades have passed

regrets piled up

like hoarders sleeping on their garbage

I feel so shallow now

I felt no commitment to anyone or anything

damn my ego, what a traitor 

what a skeevy traitor you are!

you were just laughing in the shadows

waiting for me to f**k up

knowing full well that one day 

I would learn the essence of compromise and sacrifice

you must be enjoying this pain now

seeing my bleeding remorse

I used to be able to destroy everything

in one sweeping motion

thought I was strong

shameful my oath was not my word

how misguided I was

but the path was laid early on

the pain in my mothers eyes left scares

I would not suffer like she

set in stone

I left broken spirits in the street

finally my ego is in shackles 

buried in the dungeon with the dead rats

slowly suffocating 

Reviews

[Alessander]

decades have passed
regrets piled up
like hoarders sleeping on their garbage

Very unique. It's sorta tragic and comic simultaneously

This does very much feel like a struggle between ego and perhaps id, or even superego

Or more like the ID has made the person do something the Superego/society wouldn't approve of.

Cool ending

finally my ego is in shackles
buried in the dungeon with the dead rats
slowly suffocating

Sweet.

[Hebe]

Thanks Alessander.... sometimes we get caught up in our egos...

[Alessander]

I think a lot of us are TRAPPED in our egos.
Hard cage to transcend from, that's for sure.

[Hebe]

....we can just try everyday to become a little more humble.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Set in Stone'
Hebe,
Interesting writing here. It is the the finality of realization that nothing in our life just disappears. Our conscience reminds. It says: "Could you of done better than that?" I felt in this story that the conscience was a separate entity from the one speaking about it. What a blessing to have a conscience.We can learn from our mistakes.
Kathy

[R J Askew]

I like, 'hoarders sleeping on their garbage'. Vivid stuff.

[Hebe]

Thank you R.J. appreciate your review ...it came to me after watching the hoarders on TV.... what a mess!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This is quite a self-reflective piece.. And powerful too speaking volumes.. We hold onto our egos for too long only to find ourselves broken spirited in the end..
I could deeply feel this piece 'cause that's how I feel at the mo'...

[Hebe]

Thank you Yumna appreciate your words....recognizing it, is the 1st step to put it in check, unfortunately i learnt the hard way .... hugs coming your way :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome, Hebe! Hugs your way as well! I would say, sometimes we fall apart even after that first step to move on to the next step..

[Hebe]

..... Yes that's true...I try to see is it as lessons in life... and ask myself "what did I learn from this".

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I try to do the same....

[FreedomFighter]

powerful stuff here very well done!

[Hebe]

Thank you appreciate your words.

[andrew mitchell]

emotionally charged in this dark but sad write and yes how the ego needs to be stroked, forever hungry for attention and can bleed confidence dry. lovely write

[Hebe]

Thank you Andrew appreciate your words!

[Asante]

A very raw, honest read. The ego is the biggest chain we wrap ourselves in, and you did well in verbalizing that, Jebe Hebe. :)

Good work.

[Hebe]

Thank you for your super dooper review:))

[Asante]

My pleasure!

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful, honest and worthwhile words. You made the reader feel the place of stone. A self-made prison. Thank you my friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Hebe]

Thank you John :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Lovecraft]

I think the structure really mixes well with the lines and words and theme.

This is a dark and fairly powerful poem with the concept its proposing. The whole "Broken spirit" thing is good, really good actually. :)

[Hebe]

Thank you sooo much :)

[Lovecraft]

Sorry if I took so long, I think I'm drinking a bit much lately to be honest, lol. ;)

[Hebe]

.... i could do with one myself right now ...lol

[Lovecraft]

lol, that is up to you. Hebes. ;)

[Lovecraft]

Ernest Hemingway called alcohol "Writers Fuel". So, go for it. :P

[Hebe]

Lol. ... that's not suprising he died an alcoholic ;)

[Tony Jordan]

in the middle of Summer lol

[Lovecraft]

Well, yes... but still...

[Hebe]

Cheers or bottoms up as they say in England! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

with these kinds of people...the egos will come back to bite them in the butt...

what goes around comes around...

evidenced by the harsh consequences described in this poem.
in the one line i read "mother's eyes left scars"---
j.

[Hebe]

Thank you jacob ...it's true, what goes around comes around!