Staircase to Nowhere

 

 

I saw him for the last time, as he started walking up the steps

He stopped and turned to look at me

We stared at each other, maybe for a few seconds

Understanding everything, but only silence echoed back in the empty staircase

 Our love had been rapturous

Our dreams transcending

Our lives intertwined and inseparable!

Then came ‘if’

If only we had the wisdom

If only we could have recognized the impending disasters

If only I didn’t feel that this moment had stopped time

 engraving a feeling of death…… Forever!

when will my heart stop bleeding,

talons reaching into my memories

holding onto what had once been

 the love of my life.

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Staircase to Nowhere'
Hebe,
How do we process loss of a loved one, To bring the person back? The staircase is a fitting and descriptive setting for the last meeting of souls as one goes where the other cannot follow. Your process of experience within above piece speaks volumes. Processing and having a place to express one's feelings and to work through the bitter and sweet feelings of memories layers from a past relationship of this kind is so important. Thank you for writing this brave piece.
Blessings,
Kathy

[WillaDanvers]

This is a deep piece, full of emotion and the biggest question we can ask ourselves. The what if? Love is the hardest thing to lose, by death or by choice. Love this!

[Hebe]

Thank you for your thoughts.

[emmajoy]

Looking back: sometimes we analyse too much, but then, when in a sadness or worry, emotions drown logic. There's no real moment to sum up a relationship. Your visual is exactly right for the meandering, well voiced words, random but raw feelings. Holding on is a slippery slide to... want. Perhaps.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

It was deep and a bit emotional read. holding onto what had once been the love of my life the only desire of a true lover. You portrait the picture perfectly.

[Hebe]

..... only if :) thank you

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

haha....Yes it is :) Welcome

[Kelly Scheppers]

We each have a love of a lifetime, don't we? How desperately we cling to it, as the years take us further from its reach. But we shall long remember its embrace and the joy it brought us.

A most profound read, Hebe!

[Hebe]

Thankyou ...yes... moments that we never forget.

[Neal S]

This is great. I think most have felt that sting of someone walking away. Very lovely writing! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A sad journey in your words. I liked the flow of thoughts leading to strong ending. Love is tattoos on heart and mind. Thank you Hebe for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[BBP]

Really enjoyed this piece. It told such a story in such a small amount of words. Elegant and beautifully done.

[Hebe]

Hi Bev.... thank you very much for your review, appreciate it:)

[matrixmark]

You know your my favourite poet and I am coming to you soon with you know what. This piece took me on such a ride. You have such a great talent and I love all the work which you produce. This was truly spectacular and a i have said it once and i'll say it again. You have talent.

Mark.100

[Hebe]

Thank you Mark, i think I'm blushing..... so happy you enjoy my writing, it truly makes it all worth while :)

[matrixmark]

Well don't blush...It's a piece of work to be proud of.

Mark.

[Hebe]

....your the best!

[matrixmark]

Got me blushing now!

Mark.

[D Connolly]

Wow, this poem took me to a place.... I can't elaborate, it would take years and years of back story. This made me very thoughtful.