A Wisdom Of Passing

i really hope you guys like the meaning behind this ones just as i do i worked extra hard on this one trying to apply all the tips that i have been given to the best of my ability hope you enjoy it !

faded words gleam brightly in new eyes

as new ones rarely shine in stone

but in eyes of aged crystal, light permeates beyond the surface

 

for disciplines are not learnt, or taught 

they are felt 

 

a self resonating call,

an individual truth,

a reasoning,

 

and a feeling of passing felt through the ages and beyond.

it is inconceivable

 

a malleable freedom and constraint.

the etched path is worn and deeply ingrained 

 

and obstacles are but sand underfoot

for through the changes

life  is evershifting.

 

and though worn and weary

life can be given anew

becoming a  stream 

and a pool.

to be born

and its reflection shines brightly 

on the new era,

a wisdom of passing.

and so new eyes are born,

permeating with light,

casting a gleaming reflection

on the streams and pools

and so the path etched in the stone road has become sand

shifting and worn

undefinable but true... 

Reviews

[Ted Kniffen]

Chris, this poem is a beautifully and fully defined paean to life's journey. A life journey that we all must undertake. Age and wisdom are the rewards in the end, Death but the final step of the voyage. This is without doubt a very good poem. Good write.
Ted

[TheAimlessWanderer]

Thank you so much ted i am so glad you feel that way about it. This would not have been possible for me without the advice you have been giving me so i thank you greatly for spending the time to try and help me improve and all of the wonderful constructive feedback you and others have been giving to me. This all really helped pushed me to try to give it my all in making a more coherent and complete expression !!!
Thank you for this wonderful compliment and i will continue to try my best to grow even further !!

Chris.

[Ted Kniffen]

You're welcome, Chris. Keep writing.

[thaleeyaLuna]

Very well written and expressed. Keep writing!:)

[TheAimlessWanderer]

Thanks luna glad you enjoyed it (:

[Paul Bell]

You portray life's journey very eloquently.
It is what it is, a journey.
From the start to the end, where no one know the final outcome.

[TheAimlessWanderer]

Thank you very much glad that you liked it !

[Daisy]

A deeply insightful and strong depiction of life's journey and the inter-twined truth of age and wisdom portrayed skillfully through your poetry. Excellent write-up. Looking forward to more of your brilliant work :)

[TheAimlessWanderer]

Thank you so much daisy that really made me feel good reading that. I will keep writing away and hopefully someday i will be able to accept all of these comments. Because i will feel like i really got all that i feel deeply ingrained and conveying my message of what life is to me fully and to the best of my abilities. To feel content with feeling discontent as it just means there is infinitely more that i can grow, adapt and evolve thank you for taking the time to read this so glad you enjoyed it (:

[Daisy]

No matter how much we learn there's always more out there and that's what makes you an outstanding writer in every true sense- Your attitude towards it and the urge to keep evolving ! Miles to go! Kudos :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Great thoughts and wisdom shared in this poem.
"a wisdom of passing.
and so new eyes are born,
permeating with light,"
A wise person learn from yesterday and try to do better today. The poem is positive and allowed the reader to ponder many things. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[TheAimlessWanderer]

I am glad it made you ponder and i am so happy you enjoyed it
thank you for your insight on what it meant for you (:

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Ookpik]

Man you f*****g nailed this one

[Ookpik]

1010 don't know why the rating came out less

[TheAimlessWanderer]

Wow (: thank you so much so glad you enjoyed it !!