Just Leave!!!

The dissapointment in a friend... There is NOTHING that compares to it!!! NOTHING!

 

Reveal to me your innermost desires
step not onto my fragile attires
Lead me not away from the light
This is something i have to fight

Tempt me not away from my dreams
Life might be beautiful after all, it seems
and the harsh memoirs of a past
that has promised me a life time to last

Oh dear, dear friend of mine
you seem so delicate... so so fine
I will break your spirit, i will rip your soul
If you dare stand in my way... just go!

These dispicable thoughts i have of you
Oh i cant stand being near you so soon
Give me time to work this out
Give me time to find out what its all about

Release me into a lifetime to forget
Destroy not the roads where my feet should tread
You with your false intentions and stale words
You have intentionaly bestowed upon yourself your own curse

Of anguish and pain, and whispers of hate
Of lust and impurity, and promises of fate
Mind your own goddam bussiness
I find absolutly NO pleasure in this

Tonight i whisper softly in my prayers
That God may find you resting in your lairs
And may HE not bestow upon you wat you deserve
But rather bless you with sweet sweet words

Remember me, do not neglect
the world that you and i have build
and if by your wishes, it should please you to forget.
Then do so, i hold no regrets!

I will miss you my friend!

Author's Note

Honesty Please!!!

Reviews

[Sarah]

Wow, what a powerful piece of work! I know how it feels to see a friend trying to destroy your dream just because they don't have any idea what it feels like, is that what you meant?

[Just Manoosh]

This piece was brilliant constructed, everything worked honey. The bursts of anger, frustration, hurt all fly at the reader like poisoned darts.

I am still trying to work out whether the last line is sarcasm or whether after all this you still do care for your friend ..... somewhere deep, you must do, for if there were no feelings there would be not write. Hate/love so so close.

A great write honey.
Mx

[Phill Oz O'fee]

You have certainly encapsulated the emotions of sadness, frustration, distress and disillusionment of being let down by someone you thought a friend. The verse structure gives a feeling of someone expressing great disappointment.

I think you've made an excellent job with this - there is only one (I hope) constructive point I would make and that is in line 27;

Should it read; 'And may HE not bestow upon you what you deserve'

God's Blessing
Phillozofee