Blistered from the Heat of Introspection

Prompt: Week One (Prompts an Reviews Group)

There was once a chance

I didn't take.

The road bleeding with ebullience,

I chose to forgo,

Instead, suturing my rebellious heart

Into my chest with strands

Of reluctance.

"Please say something.."

I am lost for words,

My dear.

But not just for words;

You overestimate me when you

Assume my path is predetermined.

Yes--

I am lost.

The path I took with a semblance

Of compliance

Has led me away from the life

I once imagined.

Did I really miss my chance?

"Yes."

My copacetic conceptions for an eventuality

Have been reduced to

Darkness.

The road ramified so many years ago,

I can hardly recall

The moment my feet

Led me underground.

But now,

The subterranean walls

Of my my ubiquitous sorrow

Are enclosing with claustrophobic

Surety.

The option to repent,

To turn back,

Was exhausted many thoughts ago;

I suck the dirt from beneath my nails,

And attempt to reminisce.

Author's Note

This was written for the Prompts and Reviews group, for the Prompt: Week One. (The opening sentence was the prompt).

Reviews

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Very well done. Regret sucks, and you captured this perfectly.
Pristine writing.

[brenda]

this is so good and you write super good keep writing!:)

[mizzunderstood12]

Nice!!! Very well written

[GlamGirl]

Wow! This is a great piece of work! I love the language in it. Great write!!

[Ravyne Hawke]

This is a wonderful poem for the prompt! Your imagery is fantastic and the flow is as natural as breathing. I love the conversational aspect of this.

[Judy Ponceby]

Wow! This is intense! Well crafted, excellent use of the language and evokes internal emotions of regret and remorse..... Amazing Ben The last two lines nail the emotional aspects....a simple gesture stating soo much. I swear you must have lived a few life times already :)

[.......]

But now,
The subterranean walls
Of my my ubiquitous sorrow
Are enclosing with claustrophobic

Such amazing words here,
This write is wonderful,
Such amazing words of truth really.
Well written!

[Skoo.]

"I am lost for words,
My dear.
But not just for words;
You overestimate me when you
Assume my path is predetermined.
Yes--
I am lost.
The path I took with a semblance
Of compliance
Has led me away from the life
I once imagined."
This bit ^ made my heart go "bzing" xD
...Let's just assume that's a good thing d:
This is probably one of my favourites of your writing... It's amazing (:
I wish I'd been able to meet the challenge as well as you did :L
This really is fantastic :D
Great write :D

[FJ Davis]

Not going to be difficult to be slightly more coherent than your previous reviewer.
You've met the challenge, Ben--and then some.
An excellent, intriguing piece