Heart Murmur

When a kiss

Is not the

End

But merely the

Means

To an

End

It means

Infinitely

Less.

Author's Note

Just a short little thing :p

Reviews

[Daniel Atkinson]

How do you manage to slap me across the face with such a powerful piece in just 18 words? Brilliant, man.

[BeatricePortinari.]

i've always been amazed when someone pulls off a poem with less than twenty words... and a lot of the time they don't manage. so congrats, because this is wonderful.

[Poeticadia]

An aphorism with a neat little twist. Nicely done!

[jessicamarie19]

Awesome. There are a lot of cases when a kiss is only the means to something else ... so much so that, as you have implied here, sometimes the value in that kiss itself is lost. Great insight - simplicity is often the best tool to draw contemplation!
My only suggestion would be to break the lines slightly differently in the middle for a bit more rhythmic consistency:
When a kiss
Is not the
End
But merely
the means to
an End

With that being said, I do realize that your line style puts more emphasis on the word 'means', which may be more important to you than the rhythm in that case. But it is worth considering!

Thanks for sharing.

[Judy Ponceby]

Very short, but very wise words.

[FJ Davis]

A book of meaning in a dozen-and-one-half words.
Dynamite, Ben!

[Skoo.]

How come you managed to make a sentence into a poem? And a good poem?
You're so talented, it's not fair /:
I really like this (: xx