Conflagrance

The withered leaf flees

Bourne aloft by plumes of smoke

Its brethren consumed

Reviews

[FJ Davis]

Seeing what, to most, is not there; giving meaning to seemingly trivial events. Humanizing the inhuman.
As in quantum theory, the observer has altered the observed.
Wonderful.

[Brad]

i have a hard time with senryu, they are easy to write, but it is not easy to convey an emotion with such small space...nice job

[Ben Taylor]

Oh! they're supposed to be independent of the title? I've always loved reading ones that were indiscernible without the title; they make better use of the available syllables, in my opinion. I need to read up on haiku I suppose.

[Edit]
Yeah, I guess most Haiku don't even have titles. Crapit. My other 3 are inadequate. Anyways, thanks for that though :)
I now know.

[Poeticadia]

A lovely clear visual image... and i like the deeper meaning suggested by brethren. Also, this one works independently of its title, as they are supposed to... i never quite manage that; mine lean heavily on the extra words in the title.

[Judy Ponceby]

Very nice visual :) Well done.