Illuminating Emptiness

Balefully glancing from the sky

Coruscating blandly from our

Monotonous six color

Polychrome design scheme.

Your rays

Lapping listlessly at the sights

I dutifully descry.

A pallid lack of inspiration

A tacit lack of meaning

You illuminate our

Copacetic misery

Desiccating our hopes to leave

Them a shriveled, blackened bud

Forever under trodden

Perfectly recalcitrant, the consummate

Amount of struggle to give

Meaning

To our meaning-

lessness.

Author's Note

Sunlight in this poem is intended to have a very loose analogous connection to time.

This poem essentially is stating that the constant degradation of the future we are trying to construct (our hopes) gives us a reason to live; something to strive for.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing flow of words and description in the poem. I could read your poetry over and over again. The language is very good. So many lines stood out.
"Desiccating our hopes to leave
Them a shriveled, blackened bud"
Thank you for your outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Brad]

at first i read this as hopelessness, not hope, but after perusing a second time i did taste that glint of hope, shattering through those clouds

[Hello, Goodbye]

good usage of vocabulary but also of proper connecting the feelings and imagery of those words..

[Wolfwind Words]

I really like the word usage that you've used here. They make the mind go into a higher level of thoughts and word play. Always an enjoyment. While your words conveyed the idea you were attempting too. I felt that the piece had more of a pessimistic view rather than a positive one. I felt it described someone who had toiled and toiled only to see time age their creations before they could ever utilize their true potential.

Nice ink! Makes one think and ponder.

Wolfie

[Treble]

I really really like this

[Omar Fendri]

amazing ...the image is breathtaking... an outstanding poetry
"Copacetic misery
Desiccating our hopes to leave
Them a shriveled, blackened bud
Forever under trodden" .............. are you kidding me!!! this is a sacredness !

[HopelesslyDevoted]

beautiful work

[Judy Ponceby]

This flows very well, and great imagery. Leaves one feeling lost or hopeless in the face of time.